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Missing you

Hey.. love
I miss you
guess what time it is ? its our time.. elven-elven 
our one-dy one-one-
in the morning we would be giggling creations over coffee.
in the night we would be whispering close tales under stars sipping mochas..
I am ahead of you in time. It  just doesnt feel right.   
So i have seen the mountains the kings and queens  and all the "amazing" useless things i didn't need to see. when all i needed see are those  eyes when i am first waking and ill never  see anything more breathe taking, as i wipe the trails of deep sleep from your eyes and  fiddle with your curly brows you'll  awaken to my uncontrollable  smiles.

Author notes

gawd made me all teary eyed >.< i miss my juv

Note: This is a reserve i am thinking to make an entirely new poem inspired by this one
but if i dont make it in time then use this one...

i am not feeling well AT ALL so it might take me a bit..

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  • remembering Jo
    July 10, 2008

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    So i have seen the mountains the kings and queens and all the "amazing" useless things i didn't need to see. when all i needed see are those eyes

    loved those lines


  • Dark Otter
    July 9, 2008

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    Yes, I see potential!

    I see the incurable romantic. You speak well of relationships. You do have some ability with 'just talking', informally. I really like the finish, as I ... uncontrollable smiles. You painted the picture clearly with choice words.

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    June 14, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • omanixax
    June 13, 2008

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    Melted

    There is a place within
    The labyrinths of my soul
    Only you may wander
    Through corridors silent
    And corners carved clean
    May your whispers pass
    Through the gates
    Into the garden center
    Come - dance with me
    Counting clouds and
    and blowing bubbles
    Laughing over spilled
    mochas in sneakers
    And zombies on hot summer eves.
    Wind in our hair, dancing to
    Electric rain and Technicolor thunder
    Tomorrow we will again
    passing notes in time
    among the crimson blaze
    betwixt our shared
    secret gardens


    • SoulfulBubbles
      June 16, 2008
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      hehe zombies! i miss those days soorne dey

      omanu dey lomari ^-^ times ticking we're getting closer to the edge of the clock


  • lilmermaid
    June 11, 2008

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    wow

    I can totally relate to the lines

    So i have seen the mountains the kings and queens and all the "amazing" useless things i didn't need to see. when all i needed see are those eyes when i am first waking and ill


  • sins and sorrow silver member
    June 10, 2008
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    Very pretty and heartfelt.
    Felt tears jerking on that one!
    aka: loved this a lot

  • omanixax
    June 10, 2008
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    Oh hell yes

    Gawd .. i am so melted.

  • Bob Fox
    June 10, 2008

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    So nice

    The wonderful words of longing. The message of love and the comfort it brings to your lover. A letter any men would wish to be the bearer of until eternity

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