Mirror, mirror on the wall
Who is the loveliest of them all?
Eating, drinking, only air
Sees the weight piling on
In reality, she’s getting small
Diseased mind taking over
Can no longer keep control
Eating disorder wins the race
And now she’s gone, without a trace
Mirror, mirror on the wall
Now, who is the skinniest of them all?
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i love you.
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this is just lovily
it reminds me of a poem i read in a novel called" the best little girl" it was about a race with her self not to eat.
nicily done
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thanks for entering
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Interesting. The last line was very good. The rest of the poem was nice. If you'd like to give an interview or statement feel free to message me or email me. Thank you for entering and good luck =D
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I thought this was a very good piece. I liked the way that the start and the ending were both similar but yet significantly different and I felt that it created a really strong effect which finished off the poem in a really infleuntial way. I particularly thought the line, "eating, drinking only air" was a great description, short and effective. I also loved the line 'diseased mind taking over', I know I and many people with eating disorders (and i suppose those with other mental illnesses) can really relate to this and i thought you conveyed it really well. Great Work.
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thankyou for the comment.
"diseased mind taking over" is also my favourite line haha.
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"Mirror, mirror on the wall
Now, who is the skinniest of them all?"
great last lines, i love the controversy between the start and finish -
ooh anorexia poems make me happy
especially this one,
i love the mirror mirror repetition
it totally enhances the whole obsessive thing
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lol i got the idea after reading your anorexia poem =)
and when i saw the contest i was like oooh i shall enter haha
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wow
well thats just wow...diseased mind taking over that works for quite a bit of things thats also my fave line
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