lying here in your arms
believe me,
i never saw this coming
just trying to hide
the past and let go
how long have i been running...
as we gaze up
at the empty sky
vast with countless *stars*
you trace my fingertips
across your chest
ignoring every one
of my scars
background noise
fades here with you
close my eyes and just
b r e a t h e
and this love just
feels real...
for once in my life
maybe i got something right?
taking in your very scent
just to see your face...
and be here with you tonight
the reality of all
we've made it through..
it overwhelming sometimes
and i'm sorry for all the pain
i've caused you
even though you tell me
[you don't mind]
when we look up at the *stars*
some say you feel insignificant
but i just feel grateful
just to have you
and to know
that i've finally got somewhere
and at last
there's something true
what more can i tell you
to say how i feel
at the risk of losing this chance
just reach out and take your hand
whisper to you, asking..
for one more dance
as memories collide
melt and combine =
you look into my eyes
and i think i know
what you've been telling me
all along..
.
.
.
this is it.
[x♥x]
Author notes
this was a really great opportunity for me because i was just out with him last night and realised just how much i loved him... and this entire poem is true and based on last night.. we looked up at the stars, and everything just felt right [sorry to be quite so cheezy] anyways hope you liked the poem..
♥
A contest entry
- Love poems, Letters, etc. by SaviDropKick.Oi..
375 points, ended July 14, 2008, 24 entries
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this is far from cheesy. my love poems are cheesy because i haven't expereiced true love yet. This poem really expresses true love and captures the essecne of it. Good job and best of luck in the contest.
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I love the honest emotion in this. Beautiful!
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like domz said it is not cheesy at all...i thoroughly enjoyed reading it...its full of true emotions not fake at all and thats what appealed to me the most
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Great emotive writing... ;)
hey, now that's not at all cheesey, well done you!
i hope you and John, is it?, can be happy together, you're a great girl and the guy's lucky to have you...
this piece is absoloutely beautiful, the expression of emotion is soo overwhelming and brings to life your relationship with this guy, and brings to mind the feelings we have all once felt for one person, you did a great job writing this, well done -
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thank you so much, you're so awesome... im overwhelmed with all the emotions i've felt lately and just to know that people understand and dont think i'm stupid is great.. cuz my friends would just call me dramatic lol
well thanks again :] -
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you ain't stupid..lol
nah this write hit the spot - well done again, One! domz
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i LOVE this soooo much!!!!!
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