A heart of stone is too heavy to own
Yet, I need one if I want to survive
Words, once so tender, now cuts to the bone
With you my heart was once truly alive
As my head hits the wall, the boundaries fall
I stay silent and no one hears my cry
My heart is broken as my tears exclaim
Why does it take so long for me to die?
A heart of stone is too heavy to own
Yet, I need one if I want to survive
Hurt - though your apologies are sincere
I tried and tried, but now cannot draw near
Finding strength to tell you hurt me so
Sorry love, I just have to let you go
Author notes
Written with a heavy heart as I say goodbye.
Entry by: Rebekah-Ann
In a list
A contest entry
- for woman only by Mrs. C..
500 points, ended December 17, 2008, 43 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Lifehouse - Broken by Barely Breathing.
650 points, ended August 30, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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this is beautiful. your rhyming is excellent.
the picture you have here is touching.
i can relate to this. i really like it.
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this is a lovely write and i really enjoyed this. I can feel the heartache in each and everyline here. Well done and thank you so much for entering my contest.
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A very heart wrenching write Rebekah!
I liked the repeating lines too.
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jy is sterker as wat jy dink...love die poem en dankie vir jou motiverende woorde
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I take it this is Real? So sorry.
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next time please put ap name in an not preview. jacki
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He abused you my friend. I'm glad you found the strenght to say goodbye. And knowing you, you forgave him LONG time ago... You are way to kind!!!
YOUR PRINCE IN SHINING ARMOUR WILL COME AND FIND YOU!!!
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saying goodbye hurts but when some body makes your heart feel that way you gotta. your hearts worth too much an should be warm, eh, boiling for the right one not stone. this piece is penned beautifully an puts an end to open up your new beginning
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Prayers for Peace ...
sent your way ...
Love
Myra
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aw rebekka such a heart felt write, it may just be me and my tired eyes but this one line I had to keep reading over "Finding strength to tell you hurt me so"
It is out of place I know is hard to do with using nine syllables, however it is missing that with it written like this...
mayeb omething like this would not stumble so badly
"No strength left, for you done hurt me so."
However the rest of the sonnet is well written and I am not saying that line is better then yours, I just stumbled over it and had to read it over and over...
Hugs
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Wow this poem is really deep i love the wonderful picture you have found to go with it, so true a heart of stone can be a bureden, keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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Heart cannot be of stone because it will lose its meaning and only matter will remain. Love will go on coming, blow will also not spare us. But we can survive all these if we learn how not to get attached. Let your heart and love amuse you again.
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Oops forgot.
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It has been so long since I read a sonnet. And as you well know m'love I'm a sucka for them! This was really amazing. There was so much heart and soul poured into this and the emotion was incredibly intense. I loved it. You always have a way of blowing my mind. It's so great to read your pieces. You need to find more time for poetry. Your gift is far too brilliant to be ignored.
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Very painful
to read. I'm sorry my friend for the hurt and pain you must be going through.
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Thank you. I really find it hard to pick up the pieces.
Thanks for reading my friend.
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