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Fashion's Facade

 

  Perfect poise in an imperfect frame,

  where realities lounge in

                 blurred boundaries

  of fashion's campaigned falsities

 

  For flawless beauty in airbrushed

  tones betray naïve insecurities

                 and twist wellbeing

  in striving after the unobtainable

 

  Stripped bare of layers, lighting

               and painted portrayals,

  the butterfly fades to a

  colourless moth of misrepresentation

 

  And those who foolishly devote

  diligence to the propaganda

  find themselves empty vessels

  when the image

                     finally shatters

 

 

 

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credit photographer: Ben Duggan

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  • Rend the Veil gold member
    6 hours ago
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    Dont I know that so well!

    and i diffently i am not bragging! too painful
    words written like a pro, beautiful meaningful
    flows like cream off cake.

    Blessings

    Rend


  • Joan-of-Arc
    August 10

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    This is very well done . Your soft use of alliteration works really well in this poem. I love this; it's a great poem on the perils of relying only on beauty, and the poor girls, who are tossed aside when the newest, freshest face, and youngest face replaces them.
    Well done.


    -joan.


    (p.s.: Jessica sent me here . )


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  • notorious silver member
    July 20
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    I bookmarked this a long time ago, & I still am in awe!

    "Perfect poise in an imperfect frame,"
    I wondered whether it could be "Perfect poise before/within imperfection's frame". Just so get rid of the 'an'<--not a fan of this word.

    But I'm rambling. I still love this poem.

  • notorious silver member
    July 6
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    Upon second reading, this still kicked the asses of fashion facades...I. Love. This. Poem.

  • Valley Girl silver member
    June 27

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    Wow hun! This totally rocks! I think that you have described this subject perfectly! You should send this write to "America's Next Top Model", see what they have to say! Congratulations on the well deserved Gold! ♥


  • Mark McNulty
    June 15

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    Clearly, a well deserved Gold. I had not seen the contest but strongly doubt I could have even approached a result as strong as this. I am just deeply impressd by the artistry. Once again, a job well done and congrats on the Gold trophy.

  • luna-midnight gold member
    June 12
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    yay! congrats on gold, totally deserved it

  • Ravensdark
    June 12
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    Brilliant....truth in all its glory...pity the fools, the poor fashion victims....brilliant....


  • Sailor Ptolema silver member
    June 12

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    after rereading this...I can literally hear the image/picture/mirror shatter, an unintentional onomatopoeia

  • Sailor Ptolema silver member
    June 11
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    BRAVO!BRAVO!

    damn...lol this is perfect, just perfect, and goes so well with the portrait!
    I really have nothing to critique, your words are eloquently, and arranged cohesively.
    this is amazing!
    well, well done! thank you for entering my contest


  • penman gold member
    June 11
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    Excellent

    Such a terrific creation for the picture. Another amazing piece. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Malabu
    June 11

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    this is an excellent portrayal of beauty as a facade to a world of reality...we are blessed in many ways...and to think we can make over the shell to exibit ourselves as perfect...not so...what we hold within is the real treasures...and it can glow shine and sparkle...more than..gold dimaonds and emeralds...love where you went with this outstanding write...
    Mal


  • Quiet places gold member
    June 11

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    Outstanding!

    I love the wording in this poem! So exact to the point. Very well arranged for full comprehension of the message expressed. Imagery is fantastic. Conclusion winds it up with class. Great job! Don


  • notorious silver member
    June 11

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    OH MY GOD!!! AMAZING

    Damn!! This is what the media tries to tell us in the most hypocritical fashion ("Beauty is skin deep" next to a photo of say, Eva Longoria) but in poetic fashion...this is absolutely brilliant (this site has caused me to abuse this word once associated with the British...and I'm Asian...LoL, anyways..)

    "imperfect frame"
    Wow. This could be literal and metaphorical--for example, don't we always assume certain people have perfect lives when they don't? Frame could =foundation. Or...you could just be talking about an imperfect frame, which coincides with the prompt very well too...so, nice job with this careful phrasing.

    "where realities lounge in blurred boundaries"
    You and Lavender Butterfly both have this freakish knack of using verbs in the best and most innovative way possible!! (And Weltt too...!) Anyways, your use of the word 'lounge' just kills me with how genius it is...seriously!! It's like saying realities live in blurred boundaries, except much cooler...

    "the butterfly fades to a
    colourless moth of misrepresentation"
    Ooh...stereotypical representations between a butterfly and a moth (butterfly=pretty, moth=crap) works well here. Plus, these 2 lines sounded impeccably poetic..damn.

    Love the word 'propaganda'--it's one of those words I'd not-so-casually drop into a conversation and immediately sound like some pretentious freak... It's a great word though..!!

    "find themselves empty vessels
    when the image finally shatters"
    OH WOW!! Loved these last 2 lines so much like you wouldn't believe...When you become too obsessed with your appearance (or really, anything), reality lounges in blurred boundaries...haha, okay, I'll stop quoting your poem now, but it's seriously amazing...

    Good luck and kudos...I'll shine your Gold trophy when you get it


    Jessica


    • kiwigirljacks gold member
      June 11
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      Wowzers!!! That's some comment hun!!

      Thank you so much for this!! You always make me feel better about my writing.. and I always love your inner analysis of the write!!

      You are cool!!

      • notorious silver member
        June 11
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        The fact that you need to feel better about your writing at all astounds me, but then, humble pie is good to eat isn't it?

        Whenever I write a line/phrase I think is particularly good, I have a particularly happy moment of self-pleasure--it's quite disgusting to witness.

        You are cool yourself!! =] You should enter my contest...seeing as you purveyed those points, maybe try to earn them back LoL..or just write me something fantastical

  • solo wisp gold member
    June 10

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    My Kiwi Queen! Love the viewpoint behind this poem .. you paint a brilliant picture within the mind and teach that things are not normally as they are seen when brushed in light and darker tones.

    This is classic: "the butterfly fades to a
    colourless moth of misrepresentation"

    Love it to pieces ...


  • Lil-Bit Crazy silver member
    June 10

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    wow .............. wow.... this is just awesome.... thanks for sharing it with us and goood luck in contest..! in my eyes a sure winner!

  • aboomer silver member
    June 10

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    Nicely done!! full of great depth. I especially like,
    ' Stripped bare of layers, lighting
    and painted portrayals,
    the butterfly fades to a
    colourless moth of misrepresentation' - pure wisdom and truth! Well said!!!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • jcat gold member
    June 10

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    Ya know one of my favorite sayins comes from top model Cindy Crawford, and I quote..."Even I don't look like Cinday Crawford when I first wake up".....Such an imporatnt message conveyed in that one little line if a person chooses to look for it!! No one is perfect and it takes alot of people working very hard to make one look flawless. You penned this brilliantly and I hope the message is found and heeded by all the young girls....Best wishes!!


  • poppa silver member
    June 10

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    Another great write....I think you will be adding another trophy to your cabinet...


  • Lucy. gold member
    June 10

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    Great take on the picture! I love the content, and some of the lines are great. However, since you said you don't really like it, I'll give you my one bit of critique which is just that I think it could have been pared down a bit more. What you've said could probably be said just as effectively, or more so, in fewer words. Don't ask me how! Just my initial thoughts. Great write though.

  • chiefmac
    June 10

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    How sharp this cuts to the bone. Reality fashioned and twisted to add layers, lighting and blur the image as the vessel delivering turns to be hollow of emotion. What an image to shape for reader lusting after perfection, to find a heart to small for love. This is compelling and the reader is thrust beyond beauty or even what would be soft to touch and hold with desire. Somewhere, there is a real person squeezes luster to realize it's only an image captured in the blink of an eye.


  • perfectsunset
    June 10

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    Oh my Gosh!! Was this ever powerful and brilliant. You have captured the true beauty of the picture and then some..

    Left me completely breathless, this is now my new fave. of yours!!! Amazing write sis, & best of luck

  • Rovingone gold member
    June 10
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    Oh, that's really socking it to those pasty models! You go!


  • runewalker gold member
    June 10
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    supermodels. your favs.

  • Bob Fox
    June 10

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    Propanda

    Sadly the poem speaks for itself. The mayesty of the portrait but the latent sadness that lies inside the heart. Once she loved. Beautiful write


  • LadyDementia gold member
    June 10

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    You know I love this one, If the falseness portrayed by some were stripped, it could be enough to make others catatonic...lol. Very elegantly put, all the best in the contest with it


  • The Unknown Poet1
    June 10

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    lol when do w ever really like something we ourselves wrote???? This says alot about the underlying tones within the picture. It seems to me the majority of people are wrapped up in a facade that when stripped bare of it feel ugly. Well done and good luck in the contest


  • luna-midnight gold member
    June 10

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    well you know what, i really LOVE this write, it's astonishing, and beautiful
    great job and good luck
    take care
    stephanie


  • KayJay46 gold member
    June 10

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    This is another side of you (LOL)... thoughtful, perceptive, and fully attuned with the subtleties of the image... Wonderful write with depth and clarity...
    Ken


  • Leila
    June 10
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    Wow...just wow. I love it, this is so great sis!!! Should be getting a shiny i would think! xxx


  • Weltt silver member
    June 10

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    I saw this contest and went, "uhhhhhhhhhhhhh" couldn't come up with a dang thing and now I know why. For you have stolen the exact words that I know were lodged somewhere is this mess of a brain of mine and wove a wonderful take on the picture. hehe j/k this is uniquely yours. should snatch a shiney i would think. well done sis!!

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