In the dark wings of this storm
Time moves too slow,
I feel a little bit dangerous to myself now
When the lights are turned down low,
But I still can't let the sun in
Because it blisters and burns me so,
It reminds me of the warmth in your eyes
If I only knew why you had to go ;
So the wheels keep turning,
I'm getting dizzy from the spin,
Still lying to that smile in the mirror
And it's getting harder to pretend,
So what am I suppose to do now,
The puzzle is missing too many pieces to fix,
So tell me if time really heals all wounds
Then why do I still feel so sick ;
Since you've been gone
I hear your voice in every teardrop
The night bleeds from the sky down upon my window,
I'm just waiting for these endless days
To finally tick to a grateful stop,
So I can finally open my eyes
Without seeing your face in every shadow ;
And now my body aches from this emptiness inside,
And my heart bleeds and breaks
With every memory that fades from my mind,
I'm so lost in the rage
When I wake up in the middle of the night,
I thought I heard you call my name,
Still it's nothing but the rain
Haunting me again ;
Now When I'm alone
With only the bitter truth to hold,
This angry silence begins to taunt me,
I'm way too numb to feel the weight of the cold,
Only the static on the radio to keep me company,
In a slow motion whirlwind I'm spiraling down,
Barely moving but still falling so fast,
Running on empty and choking as I drown,
I'm down to the last grains of sand in this hourglass ;
My hands won't stop shaking and I jump at every sound,
There's a burning flame in my soul
And I cant find a way to put it out,
You took a vital piece of my life
And without it I'll never survive,
So chin up and stand strong and have strength and be tough
And I know I'm losing this fight ;
The lighting crashes and I see you standing there,
On my door I can hear you scratching
You are so lost, cold and scared in these nightmares,
Do you ever think about the damage you left
Where ever you have found your peace out there,
When I wake up in the middle of the night
I swear I heard you call my name,
It's just another night after night of the same pain,
So tell me why I shouldn't be afraid
That it's still nothing but the rain
Haunting me again :
Author notes
AiM I Am
A contest entry
- how miserable can you get?... by righteousme.
850 points, ended June 13, 2008, 6 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Break My Heart by Mistress Masquerade.
600 points, ended July 11, 2008, 47 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - broken hearts! by Samm..
300 points, ended July 15, 2008, 33 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Big points...just write what you want by Canis Lupus.
4500 points, ended July 30, 2008, 84 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow!
This poem is amazing! It has a lot of good imagry in it and is very powerful and emotional. Good luck in the contest. -
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Thanks much, always an honor to hear thoughts from another artist. Thanks again for your time and consideration.
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this is a little to long for my taist and sorry to say buti already have my winner thank you for the entery though good luck in your poetry
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No problem, thanks for your time, But no, I do not write hallmark cards.
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AWSOME!
i love this poem my favorite so far it reminds me of what happened to me.. -
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Thanks much, swful what people can do to one another and the damage it can leave behind. Thanks for your time.
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Wow. I really relate to this as scray as that is. After reading a piece as haunting as this I am wondering how smart it was to ask people to break my heart, haha.
"My hands won't stop shaking and I jump at every sound,
There's a burning flame in my soul
And I cant find a way to put it out,
You took a vital piece of my life
And without it I'll never survive,
So chin up and stand strong and have strength and be tough
And I know I'm losing this fight ;"
This work is so beautiful..
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Thanks so much for your time and consideration. I'm honored that you found something of worth in the piece. It's a tough state to be in, and I've been there a few times myself. Thanks again.
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Such a sad poem that causes my own heart to feel like it is breaking all over again. I simply love this piece and the story it tells.
The pain that can fill a heart when the one they love because nothing but a loss, it becomes unbearable and turns everything against us. Making us believe many things are reminders of that one soul that is forever within us no matter the pain they brought us. How even the simple drops of rain, and sounds of thunder from lightning can turn against us ruining the beauty we once felt for it.
Wonderfully done and I simply love this poem and the sorrow it can place in one's mind when read.
Keep it up because I simply can't stop reading your work now!
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'then why do i still feel so sick'....this is really painful..as if the mind is paralysed with pain and agony...
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Thanks much for the comment, I can get to feeling a bit that way sometimes. ALways appreciated when another artist finds something of interest in a piece. Thanks again.
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I feel a little bit dangerous to myself now
When the lights are turned down low,
So tell me if time really heals all wounds
Then why do I still feel so sick ;
.... i feel dangerous in the dark too... and time healing wounds i find to be a myth... time just makes you stop talking about it...
thank you for your time and talent... the rhyme did not bother me... it flowed well and i hate when i have to admit this but the rhyme was good... haha...
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Thanks so much for your time and consideration. I'm always uhumbled when another artist finds worth and something of value in a piece. I am awed by the response line "Time just makes you stop talking about it" Oh what a tragic truth that is. Thanks again.
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