Now suppose sandpaper were more abrasive
in actuality that is the offered red carpet
though your naive bottom won't even feel it
until you struggle beyond that open door
& discover just how little they taught you
& for your tears they will suggest astringent
Author notes
graduation
A contest entry
- graduation by Dienush.
1550 points, ended June 15, 2008, 9 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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"in actuality that is the offered red carpet" ~ do you mean "than is the offered ..."?
I do not know your work but this verse suggests that you are able to write free verse quite well.
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I guess what I what I was trying to do is compare the red carpet to sandpaper. hrmmmm....
heh
Thanks
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Wow. So to the point and so sharp. Love the metaphor. Thank you for your entry.
~Diana
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haha...very nice. I liked the lines
" until you struggle beyond that open door
& discover just how little they taught you"
This amused me actually....
Great Job
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good grief!
all that's missing is your scythe! sheesh!!!
lmao!
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Wow this was so deeply brilliant. I was going to enter, but my mind draws complete blanks.. you've done an amazing job at conveying thoughts on graduation, you've done it beautifully!
Best of luck
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