This isn't much
but it's something true
a heart felt letter
from me to you
how to say this?
it's so terribly hard
should I sing it in song?
or in a little pink card?
your eyes that shine
like stars in the moonlit sky
your lips red like roses
if you left I'd die
your heart melting smile
that enchants your eyes
and the wrinkle on your nose
don't ever say goodbye
your tinkling laugh
that enchants my dreams
are you an angel?
that is how it seems
I thought it impossible
but I guess what I'm trying to say
in just a few words,
is that I love you in every way!
Author notes
Icky, another love write by me and yes I know it's cliche but I like love writes that way.
A contest entry
- Rhyme Time by Poetess12.
1200 points, ended June 23, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Peace and love baby by Silver Asylum.
800 points, ended June 19, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Corny contest (14 & under) by 1998tiger.
370 points, ended July 5, 2008, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Picture Contest/ Expression Contest by Flying Phoenix.
600 points, ended June 17, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From May 2008 by amaranthine lover.
900 points, ended July 1, 2008, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Clich'e YAY!!!!!!!! by Krick.
300 points, ended July 8, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think?
Comments
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Very sweet and simple. It makes a classical statement to whoever it is you wrote this poem for. I'm sure they were very touched by it.
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Cliche and more cliche!
Which is what the judge wanted. You can't be more cliche than this about love. I think you will do well here. Good luck!
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Cliché and redundant and just doesn't do very much for me at the moment, sorry to be the bringer of bad news.
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I love the flow and rhyme. It is beautiful. That's all I can say, just beautiful. Good luck
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Awwww
I think you chose a good type of poem to enter as corny.
Cause you always things like corny love...
song,poem,movie or story
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Fantastical
This poem is very beautiful. It has a very good rhyme scheme as well. I particularly like the line "your eyes that shine like stars in the moonlit sky". Very nice write and good luck in the contest!
"All you need is love."
-John Lennon -
I really like your poem. It has good rhyme and flow. Thanks for entering my contest.
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Heavily iced but a sweet desert nonetheless (LOL). Nice flow and good rhyme... Well done. Best of luck in the contest...
Ken
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Awww, so sweet, and beautiful! I loved the flow too. Very true, and heartfelt.
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