The judge's gavel
came down too soon
prematurely condemning me
for a crime unspoken
to my awareness
In my mind
I am innocent
free of the filth
placed within
the palms of my hands
and the trails
leading to my foot
I look out
from the hot seat
for a familiar face
but am greeted
by a blurring sea
of hollowed eyes
and ears filled with
snickers of the joke
this surprise trial
and I, myself
have become
The words
I pull through my throat
up from my heart
float above their heads
laying
as if on a bed of acid
they fall apart
unnoticed
and worthless
decaying
like my hope
faster than
the sands of my time
that I have left
here
A contest entry
- Give me your break-up poems by trekkergirl.
400 points, ended January 5, 80 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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interesting. I guess the judge is the person that you broke up with. YOu have used a whole lot of imagery here and some good ones. I am much impressed by the way you wrote this. Very good. Very interesting. Very emotional. Great job. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Wow thats deep hun. Did this really happen??? Either way its really good
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At least, it felt like that happened, comparing a break up to a surprise trial. Yeah, it was painful.
on a happier note! haha, thanks for the feedback
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anytime love you so deserve it
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OH this is so sad. I'm sorry. I like the title and the relativity to the poem. Good job and Thank you for entering my contest
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That last stanza really brought on the emotions fullforce, and I think that's a really really wonderful way to end off the poem. Very emotional write, and thanks for entering!
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This piece is wonderful. The flow and emoiton is the kind i look for. Great write
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beautiful.....soul wrenching! great job, torte!
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oh, wow...this is so deep. every word of every line is just perfect and flows nicely. and i can feel the strong emotion within this piece. well delivered!
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thank you. Yeah, my past few pieces have been straight from the heart, filled with that raw emotion, im glad it shows
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You did a great job of describing how it feels to be misunderstood. I can see this piece has a deep emotional side to it, very strong and impressionable. Great write.
Much Love
Carrie
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thanks! ive been feeling a little off recently but im glad my poetry conveys those feelings well
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If a reader can read deeper than the surface of a poem, they can come to know the author very well. I think that is is amazing to be able to understand one another without ever really having talked to each other. I hope that this period of "off" time does not last too long for you.
Much Love
Carrie -
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thank you sweetie! I hope it passes soon too
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