I float adrift
gentle waves crashing against
my boat side.
And I laid sprawed in the
basting sun. My skin cracked
from dehydration...
all I could do was pray for rain.
My thoughts lost in rememberance
but knowing I'll never make it back.
I shall die in isolation...
the deep blue my eternal grave.
I sit up examing my hands...
covered in blood of sins...
I am ashamed in that moment.
And as tears ran down my cheeks
absorbs into rotting flesh,
I was no longer alive...
SOS written in white chalk
but no one will see it
Wiping plastered hair from my forehead.
I lean over the side and dip gently
into the water, knowing the danger
lerching beneath the silence.
gripping onto boats edge I make my choice
and let my body sink below the water
air cuts off and panic sets in each inch
I drop into my cold grave...
Then serenity...memories...and I drift
away into sleep...and never wake again.
Floating with the mysteries of the sea
and the secrest I've come to hide.
Never to be discovered or missed.
Just an angel floating in water...
who's been through hell.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- A Moment in Forever by Nephlim.
600 points, ended June 16, 2008, 22 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contentment by z etoile.
300 points, ended July 15, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ok lil daughter you managed to cature the dark side of contentment. ;) *grin*
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Ok lil daughter you managed to cature the dark side of contentment. ;) *grin*
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I need to understand how this is contentment it does not sound like contentment, but discontentment.
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Wow...I could feel you pain stabbing at me like a thousand tiny daggers as each word passed my eyes. I do not know what pain brought about this piece but I hope that you never have to go through it again.
Its crazy how we feel as if e can't go on and in those darkest hours something or someone comes along to make us feel worth while. I hope that someone or something saved you from this pain.
Love ya
-Dustin-
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Oooooooooooooh I love this!!! I have a lot of piratey-sea dwelling-ocean like poems!! read "On Ebony Sails" http://allpoetry.com/poem/3199197
I LOVE YOU EGGY -
Wow!
This is painful. I loved the way this whole poem is used as a metaphor for a heart and emotions.
Bravo DgD
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I love stories and this was very well done indeed. I think, though, 'secrets' instead of 'secrest' I can't say enough good about this piece, it's great.
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Oh, wow
Awesome poem, good write hunny... I miss ya.
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to much jack sparrow or what ?
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That must be it
lol...you actually amused me 
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erg! eggys! i always want to be the first to write a comment but people.... keep getting them b4 me
... anyways thats a great poem ! i wuv you eggy! (holly) 
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Thank you for following the rules!
An angel that has been through hell, what I thought, I love it! Very good description of this dying moment, powerful images and words. Good luck!
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WOW!
the emotion in this piece! this is incredible!
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omg! this is so sad im teary eyed
xoxo- good job
love, christina
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YOu almost made me cry, you poop.
*tear*
this is so good, though.
I love it, i really do.
But no wheres close to how much I love you.
Remember. I'm always here for you.
Remember, I put up with a lot of your shit. =P
your words ,not mine.
i love you!!! =D
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Hurm...
*Sits in a canoe, and comes to save your ass.*
Yes, I so would do that. This sounds liek it'd be in a movie, and I have to agree with the person below me. This is powerful, with lots of imagery, and it isn't too long or too short. Nicely written, though I would like to a 'happy' poem from you!
Anyways. Contnue writing my lovelie.
ily.
+Mell+
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Eggeh It's really good. I like it a lot but it makes me sad. I really like the imagery. You rock.
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