That Tender Leaf...
by Darmok
12-26-03
and as I linger o're these broken stems,
sucking straw a blissfull moon.
I wonder what the stars are made of
should ever I taste such a beautiful thing.
I would tell you then what it is,
what savored taste this is.
Oh what guarded quiet is that gentle kiss,
that longing makes in dreams remiss.
For it to find that tender leaf,
stripped of skin, naked ...beyond belief.
It is hope,
that blend of day and night
that Love extreme ignites...
the stars that bend to our will...
in sight...for taste of love
requite.
Author notes
Should you take a liking to this poem, I must tell you it is only one ray reflecting from a multifaceted gem of a poet we know as Pataliyah. Her poem 'Parting'is fresh, therein find you a quivered green, a tender heart. allpoetry.com poem 428589
Written December 29th, 2003
A contest entry
- PREWRITE Festival: Enter As Many As You Want: Quickie by Ryno.
300 points, ended February 14, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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words reach within that light where memories leave their impression
and in that making their mark on us where sometimes it counts the most!
Keep penning on one stroke at a time!
Bill
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SW, I find some of your best poetry within your "comments". That freedom of spontaneous thought and reaction is a reflection of self, the mind and the heart, making for fluid creativity and great reactive prose.
myself; I don't know how to 'turn that on', without a read of some inspirational poetry beforehand...I wish I could though. I hope you notice this too. Darmok thank you for your reads!
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this is a fine, if short, love poem with some excellent allusions here...and I did greatly enjoy it! bravo...
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Beautifully penned ... stunning imagery & very strong all together ... I loved every minute of reading this
Well done, thank-you for the entry.
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Lovely, lovely, lovely. Beautiful language in this piece and metaphors that just leave me wide-eyed and opened-mouthed in amazement. Nicely done.
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too long
ago, I wrote this and did not express my thanks for such generous reads and comments. I thank you and hope I have not lost the opportunity to repay the time you have shared in your visit. Darmok
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very well written
Very beautifully written. I love the flow of your words and the story that they tell. Many amazing metaphors in your poem and love that is returned is a beutiful thing. I am still hoping.
etherealforu
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That was a really "GOOD" write!!!!
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Wonderful imagery and word choice. I also like the background, it simply goes perfect with this piece. Nice write, and thanks for sharing.
Live. Love. Be. Believe.
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wow nice imagery here That is a beautiful write my friend. I could picture everything. and to me, that is what makes poetry. great job,
Thank you for sharing purely amazing -
Oh where has my muse gone, these words seem so far away, and I adrift on open sea, feel nothing but a blank horizon....
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thank you for such encouraging words. I suffer these dry spells because I am unfortunately not a driven writer. So if I haven't the time or inspiration, I can go a month or two or three without penning a rhyme. It good though, cause I'll come back hungry for that something that clicks, and most of the time inspiration is found in special conversations or reading their verse. When I am writing, its not for practice or lesson, its because of inspiration and that is like being in the right place at the right time so don't hold your breath waiting for me
but thanks for the most delicious complements. -Darmok
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as usual,beautiful words that really enthrall the senses and sort of make the reader stop for a few seconds to savor them ...you speak in a way that seems to have unfortunately gone by the wayside somewhat and is making room for internet lingo (what a shame eh?)
with all respect , and I am so glad to see a few of your writings again(but maybe that is why they are what they are)you seldom speak, but when you do....the walls shake
Reenie
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Beautiful Darmok. Simply beautiful. You are very talented sir. Have you ever thought about publishing your writings?
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Thank you so much for the reads! zz(snoopy dance)zz
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Excellent
This is so beautiful its breath taking! I hope to read more of your beautiful words, in the near future. Thank you for sharing and keep them beautiful words coming.
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"it is hope..that blend of day and night" beautiful line and this piece is intriguing ...freda
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as I gather the emotions herein, surplus in genuine love and endearing remark. I 'know'....the hearts that speak their truths, and impart their blessings on this poor soul, now so very rich in welcome, and arms that reach and wrap around, pulling loose ends together...making one whole.
I thank you for your caring remarks, the appreciation and reflections you share, letting me know how easy it is to offer something of myself, how rewarding it is to care. -Darmok -
BEEEEEA-U-TI-FUL! Wow. I truly miss your poetry.
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Love's hope is eternal
Unchanging and everlasting
Forever and a day...
THis is such a beautiful write
so heart touching
This made me ~SIGH~
Smiles~Hugs~Emma
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Brilliant!!
Darmok...Fantastic work of art...this poem. Beautiful in its form and beautiful in its language. I am in awe of the talent that created this poetic gem. Thanks for sharing this poem with us. These are just some of the lines that impressed me:
It is hope,
that blend of day and night
that Love extreme ignites....
the stars that bend to our will.....
in sight.....for taste of love
requite.
Sorry for the lateness of my reply. But I am infinitely better for the reading of this poem. **Ivy Rose -
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Joel...you know how much I appreciate you, your incredible, ever complementing replies...your words here far surpass my attempts. Such a marvelous rounding out, a completing...thank you.
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I'm flattered by the beautiful comments you've left; all of them from the first to the last. The generosity of your words are encouraging communicate an understanding of much more.
ps. If it hadn't been for "Parting", tho, these words may never have seen this page. Do take a look at Patrice's poem if you haven't already. thanks -Darmok -
touchingly beautiful
you have a lovely way of writing what you feel. genuine and beautifully touching, with the signature talent of handling this kind of poem you have, magical and beyond reality, like love always is. well-captured, you have a divine way to get right inside the emotion to give it to the readers generously. -
this was so romantic and i liked the way that you used a capital letter on the word Love. it definately deserves it in this poem. liked the illustration too.it seems to belong in the past and seems unreal like a fairy tale.
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An ellipse is three ... dots, not any more or less. Lovelt sentiment however, very ah, dark green and ah, leafy. Possibly for a lovely forest nymph you are pining for? you use of olde english was moderately cute, however.
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thank you Katie!
-Darmok
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I would tell you then what it is,
what savored taste this is.
Oh what guarded quiet is that gentle kiss,
that longing makes in dreams remiss.
For it to find that tender leaf,
stripped of skin, naked ....beyond belief. Absolutely Brilliant!!! a beautiful piece of writing, it reminded me of the old way of prose, so delicate, yet so very full of strength in your imagery... well done!!! ~wishintreeUK~~ (Katie)
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To blend with the word, the taste of stars,
this poem has been stripped of skin, naked; and so its spirit shines.
Beautiful piece, I believe you have kissed the stars.
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Oh sweetie
I am like Rennie who could not like this beautiful poem
I really really enjoyed it quite the setting before I go off to bed again with this headache
Wanting to wish you a Happy New Year in 2004, may it be filled with warmth,happiness, health and love
Do come see me new ones up
Love & Hugs
Susan~~~~~~
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Joel...who could not take a liking to this poem . It never ceases to amaze me how you get inspired by someone's write and then manage to create your own beauty with it
May your new year be a happy one and may the road guide you to where your heart is yearning ,
Reenie
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