Maybe this is not a poem.
Something Charlie said,
about Madrid
being dry dusty and warm:
People with plastic faces
turned on and off,
in the storm.
So maybe this isn't a poem.
I could turn the words upside down,
if you dare me to,
or walk them round and round,
if you want me to;
but that won't make this a poem,
nor that tear
which I put in the proper place,
not even that
will make this a poem.
You press me between your pages,
smooth my ragged edges,
but I am not a poem
either,
or the white carriage
that gathers you up
from your father's house.
Yet despite all that,
I will not leave you behind,
as though you were the poem
and needed to be defined
like a poppy in the field;
but that would be my love,
consigned;
and not a poem at all,
though this might be
even if it's not in a heavy book,
placed precisely on a shelf
with a number on the spine.
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Written December 29th, 2003
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I always read under the words, felt the tension stretching the screen, from day one.
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Hehe. You have this classified as an Other. Not a Poem.
Thanks for reminding me of this.
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THis is lovely - I enjoyed every carefully written line - really great - I thought the journey was brilliant I am glad I came along for the ride - great stuff - brilliant work
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Whooooaaaaa!!! I actually got dizzy there! Anyways, it's definitely a good one. Well written. Well thought out. Great work!
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interesting
Merry meet,
Hmm, not a poem? Intresting collection of words and images for a "not poem". I though a not poem was an essay, silly me.
I'm not sure what it is but, I like it, therefore I'm not really sure if I could give is a critical review.
Amythest -
Okay this is not a poem, but to tell you its real good not to be one I like nonpoems it makes you think about the poems.
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this goes round and round ..loopy and a bit swoopy..no no no you are not a poem .. alledged quarterback thief ..
poppy's in it .. reminds of dorothy in the field all sleepy and stuff.
once i got a book in the mail and it had flowers in between the pages and i loved to stick my nose in the book and sniff the flowers .. it was pretty.
damn. was here already. no points.
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it says it's not a poem but i consider it beautiful nonetheless. wonderful wonderful work.
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Good.
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Hi, I have said this before, that I am no expert on poetry, I just happen to love it...I like this kind of write, I find myself thinking a new train of thought from reading this, of how much I love the jazz of words in any form. In a way this inspired something in me, like to have more confidence in my own work. Thank you for sharing this, you have got me thinking
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Its liek it personifies poetry. This is like my poem... i think its called poetry or something like that I have 39 os its hard to keep track of the titles.
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May be apoem, may not be a poem, may be apoem disguised as a non-poem, may be foolish to ponder so much over this. May be this is amusing you others. Whatever, it is good.
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still wandering - i was actually looking for a poem i think you wrote about Alexander Pope's the Rape of the Lock ( or perhaps you quoted a stanza in the begininng of a poem am I imagining all this ? ) which I am currently reading out on the deck in the sun when I'm not up here reading Lute poems today .. saw this and stopped in . i always press things between pages .. flowers, cards, pictures, notes, i'm a page presser. but it do it for the most sentimental of reasons .. anyway. i'm off to find that poem I'm looking for ..and if not to get back to Belinda .. Slyphs Salamanders, Gnomes, etc.
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enchanting indeed... I'm speechless lute.
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I enjoyed being pressed between your pages too, although I fail to see how you could write anything and have it not be a poem...but I don't think this is what you are trying to say.
Give me another read or two, let me catch up, and I'll be back here, between your pages, breathing in that old book smell and wishing I could see more.
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Yup. Lute the Magnificent. All about the not poems, eh? Sweet. Likes:
"You press me between your pages,
smooth my ragged edges,
but I am not a poem"
I enjoy getting my edges smoothed. Kind of relaxing.
----- for unpoetry
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quirks her eyebrow...not a poem? Silly man...
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Hmm and we're here now we're there up and down we jot it all down, I am enjoying this but also have some confudsion
Lakota x -
May not be a poem, but it sure as hell is a good whatever it is. gasp One I can sorta grasp! I actually kinda get this one. Go me.
Anywhoo. No point in telling you it's good... But it is.
Jade -
Shit this is a good poem.
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I know... it'a not a poem, even I can see that...even though it reads like one, and has the feelings of a poem, and the images of a poem...and the beauty of a poem, and makes me feel like I've just read a wonderful piece of poetry.....but that's okay...I know it's not a poem.... I can accept that
Dee
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simply elegant. like a whisper on a loud morning. stunning.
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amazing, talented writer that you are. Lissa
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Maybe this is not a critique
Maybe a fragile substitute
For a Lute tribute
Of which we dare not speak.
About how the Lute appropriates fragments of worms
(If you want me to)...
Maybe this is numbered precisely One Thousand
In the litany
Of wormy critiques
But that does not make it a critique,
Although pressed numerically into cyber-statistics
Like a pressed flower,
Kinda neat ....
Comme la pipe de Magritte.
Flowers for the Unpoem, from AP's lowliest Unpoet, who, naturally, likes this sorta thang.
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Oh Lute... this is beautiful! I adore this, you've truely shown me something creative and enchanting to read. I needed to read a poem like this today, gave me an over-due smile
In case I haven't told you lately... you write amazing poetry
~ Wendy -
very good
though this might be
even if it's not in a heavy book,
placed precisely on a shelf
with a number on the spine.
BRAVO
For those unpublished but perhaps just as skilled, we salute you.
John
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