At night I lie in bed
Staring into space
Thoughts run through my head
"Do I matter in this place?"
Depression
Morning sun invades my sleep
My flesh feels like fire
No need to make a peep
Silence is my desire
Depression
Fake smiles in my sight
Tired of this crap
What makes happiness right?
I think I'm going to snap.
Depression
Open bottle on the floor
Pills scattered about
At this moment I am no more
Death no doubt
Depression
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A contest entry
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I can completely relate to this poem. Especially the first stanza. However, I've never tried to commit suicide. There's very strong emotion here, I think because it's such a sensitive and widely felt subject.
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"Morning sun invades my sleep
My flesh feels like fire
No need to make a peep
Silence is my desire"
I know the feeling!i go through it everything...i love the way i can related to ur poem!
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It's definitely a depressing poem (duh)
Anyways....
I liked how you kept repeating "depression"
it makes the point easy to understand.
It's quite up-front.
"Open bottle on the floor
Pills scattered about
At this moment I am no more
Death no doubt"
This stanza is something I see a lot of places. && I know why I see it all the time.
It's not something cliche. It really isn't.
It's just that a lot of people feel the same way, and you should take comfort in knowing your not alone with depression.
It's a fact.
Dark write.
Very well penned.
Good luck in the contest!
Sincerely,
dovey ~
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Deep.
This is an amazing poem!
I relate to this poem a lot. I suffer from depression and this really gives some insight on the subject.
I absolutely love the first stanza. It is powerful.
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