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lakewater

da vinci took the pawprints
of an angel
and made them art;
he told them secrets
i had once thought myself
unwilling to say.

and yesterday's rain comes
late, pouring over the fingerprints
i thought i'd burnt away
on his leather tongue,
and a thousand ways to say
no.

but once,
there came a yes
from between the bench
and the beacon,
the black water
splitting laundry baskets,
and satin moths sitting
on my hips.

(this time
it's real).

mother, i promise,
i am not morgana,
but i have risen
out of this water
with only black ink;






and the wind
cannot blow me down.


Author notes

ok.

so, my mom was really excited when i told her that i made it to the final four. so yeah, she teaches medieval literature, from gilgamesh to arthur to shakespeare.

so i put a couple references to that in there. da vinci is part of what she teaches, as well as morgana, who refers to morgan le fay from king arthur.

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  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    June 11, 2008
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    I think that perhaps you have come the farthest in this contest. This was excellent.


  • Tangled Angle
    June 11, 2008

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    pawprints of an angel - perhaps handprints would have worked? that's just me being picky though. haha

    besides that, i thought you did a great job. i really liked the ending - simple, but gets the point across.

    overall, very good.


  • Tinkerbell-Or-Me
    June 10, 2008

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    "da vinci took the pawprints
    of an angel
    and made them art;
    he told them secrets
    i had once thought myself
    unwilling to say."


    this is beautiful.
    and i love the references.

  • Tinkerbell-Or-Me
    June 10, 2008
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    "da vinci took the pawprints
    of an angel
    and made them art;
    he told them secrets
    i had once thought myself
    unwilling to say."


    this is beautiful.
    and i love the references.

  • obfuscate
    June 10, 2008
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    MWAH.


  • girl shaman
    June 10, 2008

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    you did increadiable! this whole piece screams maturity! [sorry i cant spell too good :/ ]
    anyways back to the poem; im sorry but i really suck at commenting but all in all i definatly enjoyed reading this & the referecnes where on point & very well executed thank you for sharing !!

  • unraveled
    June 9, 2008

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    tehe... i love gilgamesh

    nice job, i liked the references you threw in there really complimented the whole poem. i think the beginning is my favorite part.

    -cassidy

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