Sliding through the box
I find the ends
kicked out
the only thing I can't decide
is which end I will
exit out.
A contest entry
- Cocoons & Rebirth A Poetic Challenge by BluesMan.
3500 points, ended June 13, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Excellent I like these short and ostounding peices like this one
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Excellent
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Tis a wonderful piece of poetry
Splendidly done in it's brevity
Thanks for sharing your poem.
Tony
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This is one of those poems that--to its credit--leaves more unsaid than said, and in doing so opens itself to thought. Who kicked the ends out of the box? What are the consequences of the choices offered? Is it significant that both stanzas end on the same word? Does that suggest an underlying optimism connected with either choice? Fun to speculate.
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Short sweet and indecisive You broke out of the cocoon and didn't go any further Reguardless I still liked it Thank you for entering my contest
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Oh, I can sure relate to this. ..nice
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That is a clear image! There are things in life which cannot be done in a box or a rut. There is a choice, to go forward, or back. Good luck!
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Excellent
What a great creation for theme. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest. -
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Thank you Penman! Your comments are much-appreciated, especially after reading your wonderful poems!
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Oh a very clever and well written response to the prompt
All the best with this.
Gaylene
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Thank you for your comment and isn't it fun to write on AP when the prompt strikes you and speaks to your muse?
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i panicked. i could never find the way out ,,good luck xx
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Such a delightful comment, Peter, I don't know if I did either. Or many to get out and then just jump back in?
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maggie jumping in or jumping out , who cares jumping keeps us on our toes..
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A unique interpretation my talented friend. You're such a pleasure to read!
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Thank you for the wonderful comment. It is also a pleasure to hear from you and read your poetry!
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Good luck in the contest!
Short and sweet. The title describes it well.
This poem brings fond memories for me. Kicking my way out of cardboard boxes. Heh, that used to be all I needed to entertain myself. A big ol' cardboard box.
Great write!
May your pencil never break!
~squirrel
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Thank you squirrelgirl, and may your fingers never cramp because you gave an insightful and delightful comment!
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Love the title...
...you have said a lot in a few succinct words. What end? Life is full of those decisions...I am sure you wil make the right one for you.
I like the poem. It says a lot in a few words and it leaves me thinking...do I make decisions like that? Is it really so simple? Once I have made them, that is it!
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Thank you for the wonderful comments and the comments telling me what you like. It helps a lot because I was wondering about the title. It really helps when someone makes suggestions/tells you what they like.
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excellent
What a great take on the prompt. So very well done. Best of luck in the contest
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Thank you for the compliment on this poem. Again I am amazed at how much fun entering creative contests on AP can be and the many directions that the prompts take everyone.
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Oh, this is a really cool poem. Which direction will the butterfly go? (I would go whichever one moves me closer to Jack Sparrow, what a cool background!)
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Thank you, if I was a butterfly that would be my direction also!
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