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Glamorous Fiction

 

Worshipping tangible gods,
fashionably idolizing.
Cosmopolitan ideals,
falsely advertising.

Platinum plastic power,
absolution granted.
Grandeur expressions,
formalities implanted.

Thousand dollar shoes,
humanitarian amnesia.
Desensitized by Prada,
arrogant anesthesia.

Gucci-induced vomit,
size zero undigested.
Expensively sculpted,
silicone invested.

Ill conceived notions,
botox-ed perfection.
Purchased contentment,
artificial complexion.

Children worn like jewelry,
costume domestication.
Vogue-style living,
persona amputation.

Time warped body,
high-end labeled mind.
Receipt for shallow soul,
synthetically designed.

 ~.~

Author notes

POY
----- PO Theme: She has it all...except for nothing that is real.

(yes... I have a lot of shoes, but they are all cheap!)




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  • cricketjeff gold member
    December 31, 2008

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    Excellent theme and beautifully executed, I am not a fan of this highly clipped style, I like my poetry in English and that means connective tissue
    But a pretty definite inclusion in my top ten.

    Jeff


  • Arkbear gold member
    December 29, 2008

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    Hello Jamie ~

     

    I must repeat.>>>>(in your words of course)....>>>>>

     

     

    Worshipping tangible gods,
    fashionably idolizing.
    Cosmopolitan ideals,
    falsely advertising.

    Platinum plastic power,
    absolution granted.
    Grandeur expressions,
    formalities implanted.

    Thousand dollar shoes,
    humanitarian amnesia.
    Desensitized by Prada,
    arrogant anesthesia.

    Gucci-induced vomit,
    size zero undigested.
    Expensively sculpted,
    silicone invested.

    Ill conceived notions,
    botox-ed perfection.
    Purchased contentment,
    artificial complexion.

    Children worn like jewelry,
    costume domestication.
    Vogue-style living,
    persona amputation.

    Time warped body,
    high-end labeled mind.
    Receipt for shallow soul,
    synthetically designed.

     

     

     

    ...ooops!

     

    Did I just paste your whole poem?

     

    Hmmm....I guess because besides the Poem, *Wayward Child* by Cupcrazy, at bottom of page, http://destinationpoetry.com/PO__Contest_Series.html  .....

     

    this has to be the most Creative and well-thoughtout write to enter AP this year.....you have just pushed someone out of my Top ( 10 ) spots

     

    I am curious as to what yout other Judges are going to say about this........it was such a pleasure reading it again ~

     

    Good luck & God bless,

     

    Bear ~


  • Immortal Obscurity gold member
    December 28, 2008

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    Hi Jamie, and welcome back

    First of all, great use of alliteration. Phrases like "arrogant anesthesia" and "platinum plastic power" added just the right touch of... well, power. Yep, I made a funny!

    I loved this write; your theme is quite original, though I do recall seeing a poem about shoes when I was entered in October's POM Seems the others have taken a cue from you, so you might be the one to give 'em the boot... Make it a stiletto-heel

    I was reading an article in Cosmo recently, which had a list of 7 things that make you happy; material-goods were not among them Thanks for entering & good luck!

    Laura


  • Overcast
    December 28, 2008

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    I don't generally like this genre of poetry too much, so it is entirely to your credit that I absolutely love this one.
    Bookmarked!

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    December 26, 2008

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    Hey there I liked this write. People are so stuck into society that wants perfection and never seems to offer anything back. Thanks for your Entry I hope you had a nice Christmas take care oh and remember no editing once a judge has commented.


  • islekine gold member
    December 26, 2008
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    Aloha Jamie!

    I loved it when you won the Gold..great write!
    Best wishes in the contest!
    Write on!
    Remember: No editing once a judge has commented.


  • rite
    November 29, 2008

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    If all brain dead followers of fashion who comply with whatever type of crap is conjured up by some ego tripping idiot would be shot on the spot for failing to grasp anything that requires more than a negative IQ to successfully process, not many would be left to clutter up this planet. I guess it is due to some kind of evolutionary flaw. Your silver-tongued words focused attention on this matter, that requires a properly functioning brain however to appreciate. Congratulations with the win.


  • nevadapoet
    November 1, 2008

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    BRAVO

    What an excellent twist of words...a true trophy winning write. Your language is powerfuly packed and each stanza slaps hard the face of today's society. Nicely done...very strong write.
    Shelly

  • dx d by me
    September 30, 2008

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    Absolutely extraordinary poetic social commentary! Definately something different, and definately NOT disappointing. Geo


  • SilverQ
    September 27, 2008

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    Wow

    A depressingly true description of our so-called "culture". I completely agree with the message. And to top it all great flow and use of rhyme. The only thing wrong is the title, dosn't catch at all and when I first read it actually gave the opposite impression then the poem. I was not going to read untill I scrolled over and saw the tags.

    ~Need comments on my poems, thanks~


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    September 15, 2008
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    Sweet!

    ...and, man, doesn’t this say a lot! High marks here for imagery, topic, and a real live 6-syllable word! (So many people afraid to invoke anything over three syllables) A little light on word count, but I think you submitted this before my request for 200 words. Thank you for entering this pointed gem.


  • Nangaleema
    August 28, 2008

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    congrats on the gold trophy it is well deserved. i agree with what everyone has said here already - great write! - NANGALEEMA


  • The Perfectionist
    August 26, 2008

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    Th truth lives within you lol

    We live in a pretensious, materialistic world and for a moment there I thought I was the only one worried about humanity going down the toilet. At least I know I'm not the only one who sees this. And my favorite part has to be "Receipt for shallow soul,
    synthetically designed."

    Now that's utter perfection in the description of 80% of today's society. Great Work!


  • lilAj
    August 19, 2008
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    oh goodness!

  • davidwright silver member
    August 6, 2008

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    A great tribute to te see-thru existence that surrounds us. I see you're in one of Arkbear's contests with none of the the's and's or but's added. I hope you won - appy trails.


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    July 17, 2008

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    well there isn't much I can say that hasn't been said by someone else in a better way than I'm capable of, so I will just say congrats on writing an exceptional piece. On second thoughts, I need to add my two cents....Each and every line is so powerful that they could be used as the cornerstone of a great write. Added together, they build something akin to the great pyramids, awe inspiring and ever lasting. Well done.
    Rory


  • Age of Rain
    July 17, 2008

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    *sighs in ecstasy* Your first stanza = AMAZING! I have been so often placing white on black I've forgotten what a properly whitened screen looks like. I was like wow, what a great background! I nearly kicked myself after of course. Hahah. 'silicone invested' was a great phrase! Love it. Your ending too, it kicked!


  • Congruence
    July 8, 2008

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    Some parts work better than others - it is difficult to combine a very strong message with a style which does not allow much leeway - that said this is very interesting, it is brave in the sense that it is powerful and sticks to its guns.

    I would want just a bit more flow to it - not that this is bad far from it, it is a really good piece. As a writer i can see that, as a reader though, just smooth out some of those parts.

    James
    x


  • xXDarkChildXx
    July 2, 2008

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    I love this poem. It just makes me feel so much better, that I truly hate fasion, and don't care if I am or not. I really have nothing, and I mean completely nothing. This poem is truly something different, I've never seen any poems about fasion on here so far. It made me think even more, that fasion divas... really have nothing real. Very nice write. Keep on writing.


  • badnovocaine
    July 1, 2008

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    wow this is a great poem, it is different, but in a good way. This is one of the best written poems iv seen so far. Keep it up.


  • Trent plus pen
    June 30, 2008

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    Fantastic!!!

    Really loved the use of alliteration in this poem. Gives in a great flow and sound.

    Goodluck in the contest!
    Trent


  • quantumsurveyor
    June 30, 2008

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    God help me - how did you produce this savage poem on our (women's?) lives. To say it is brilliant is to do it an injustice. I often niggle here and there - not a niggle in sight. Thank you for being a real woman.


  • Haley-baby1
    June 29, 2008
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    you are wonderful


  • toomysterious
    June 24, 2008

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    This is an amazing write and well deserving of the Gold. I love how you pulled everything together and it so fit the prompt, excellent flow and rhythm. Rovingone wrote such a wonderful pirate poem about you I just had to check it out and I am so glad I did.


  • teddybare
    June 24, 2008

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    superb

    i like this write alot .. humanitarian amnesia .. i'm prolly gona steal that :,
    great work and message here here

  • celadia
    June 24, 2008

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    A lot of American woman like plastic surgery, they even have a reality show about this, interesting phenom, eh?
    Have you heard about the New York woman who has paid to have her face look like her cat? Congrats on gold, it's nice to read something about society and how it's turning out.


  • NeonRose
    June 22, 2008
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    Well done, Jamie! Congrats on the Gold!

  • dillpickle62
    June 22, 2008

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    Congrat's!

    On your gold! You truely are one of the hottest poets on AP.
    Some day I expect to pulling a best seller off the shelf.


  • aboomer silver member
    June 21, 2008
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    Congrats on the GOLD!!!!

  • Arkbear gold member
    June 21, 2008
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    Hi Jamie :)

     

    As a guy.....even a gay guy, this Title does nothing for me, and I don't believe I would stop to read this write ~

     

    :(

     

    Perfect job on filler words ~

     

    Theme.....OMG....brilliant!

     

    *humanitarian amnesia........arrogant annethesia*....Holy Crap!!!....This is definatley the way the Power force in the world keep their straight faces.....numb to the real world around them ~

     

     

    *size zero digested.......silicone invested.........botoxed perfection........artificial complextion..........children word like jewlery......persona amputation.........receipt for shallow soul........synthetically designed*

     

    Ummmm.......is there anything else you want to blow my socks off with?

     

    :)

     

    Rhyme is the best I have witnessed in my many years of reading poetry.....and I ((( hate ))) rhyme :)

     

    I have to agree with Julie.....this really tops everything I have read as of late........another standing ovation in southern CA!

     

    There is nothing more to critique here ~

     

    You have sealed your position in one of the top 3 Trophy spots......you have not only klnocked this write out of the park, but you have penned one of the best reads I have read in quite some time.......make sure you enter this into the POY for this year.....IMHO, it may have a chance to stay in the Top 3 Trophy spots ~

     

    Good luck and God bless you!

     

    Bear ~

     

     


    Title  Already thoughts on your chosen Title -
    Flow  Meter is off by count......yet Flow brings it back into play nicely -
    Depth  Splendid amount of Imagery and great balance of Show & Tell -
    Theme  Not as Original as I would have liked to of seen, but the Creativity is beyond what I've seen lately -
    Feelings  Lots to feel here.....emotionally stoked full of Power -
    Grammar  Perfection at its' best -
    Presentation  I absolutely loved this middle-aligned....and I am NOT a fan of middle alignment -
    Uncommonness  Not so much uncommon, as it is creative -
    Sit & Ponder Affect  Still blown away -
    Ability to follow Rules  Perfect -

     

    Bears Score: Over-all, a write which could win Gold in any contest....will it win here? 

     

    Good luck!

    • jamiedoring
      June 21, 2008

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      THANK YOU !!!

      Hi Bear, hope all is well. Just wanted to say thank you SO MUCH for the Gold.

      ~ I do so so declare this here as my shiniest gold EVER

      ...serious...what an honor to even place amongst this talent. THANKS AGAIN!!!


      Jamie


      • Arkbear gold member
        June 21, 2008
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        Very cool Jamie :)

        Well earned Gold for sure.....nice writing!

        See ya soon!

        God bless,

        Bear ~


  • trista gold member
    June 16, 2008

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    Jamie, Jamie, Jamie!!!

    WOW! I've read some great poetry lately, but this really tops them all! Sorry I'm so late commenting...I've tried my best to forget about this contest and have done a great job until islekine reminded me...and now I have 7 hours to come up with something to try and top this??? NOT GONNA HAPPEN! LOLOLOL

    Congrats on an awesome poem...with SO much truth. I hate shoes simply because it's hard to find anything that doesn't hurt me. I currently have a shiny new pair of $125 shoes...but they are orthodic, and my insurance paid for them. (Heaven knows I freak at paying $10 for a pair. )

    As my 15 year old niece would say..."You Rock!" Best of luck in the contest...NOT that you need "luck", and NOT that this contest has anything to do with anything beyond quality writing. And you have zero problems there, IMHO.


    ~J.

  • aaaaaaaa
    June 16, 2008

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    Wow excellent use of words. Simply fantastic. I love your style. Using just a few high syllable words a line. It's different and fun to read. The last line is great and really ends the poem nicely. I smell a winner


  • angelcalled666
    June 16, 2008

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    to true..


    unearthing things people so politally sweep under a rug.

    wonderful, wondeful.

    ♥


  • eating vertigo
    June 16, 2008

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    WOWOWOWO!

    Holy wow.... so many words.
    I'm adding you to my favorites doll, that poem was fantastic and very true to the world.
    Synthesized creations indeed, many of us let money and fame and plasticity be our downfall nowadays, when really it's all just a fraud.
    I can't say how you could improve this as I find it perfect how it is, and my writeing sure as hell dosn't surpass yours in any way.
    So, I'll just leave it at that,
    and say have a good day. ^__^

    Bahah, it was a joy reading your talented work,
    ---Raven.


  • z etoile
    June 15, 2008

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    I totally agree with this piece. It is easy to get caught up in all the stuff of life and really have everything imaginable but have nothing. I loved this poem. You have a lot of shoes. I have 2 pairs. I have never been into shoes LOL or shopping I have no idea why. I have 2 pairs because I don't want to have to go to the store and buy more I hate tryingthem on.
    But that is me.
    I loved this piece and the underlying message great job!


  • Pisces Pieces
    June 15, 2008

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    This is brilliant and I love it! The sadder thing is that there's SO much truth to it.

    You really did do an amazing job with this, and I know I haven't read any of your other work yet but you clearly have serious talent!

    ♥


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    June 15, 2008

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    Yes, you have so well described and put over the 'smells' of the fabricated walls of 'soul-less hell'.

    Punched home good and proper!

    Well written jamie, good luck in the contest.

    Sol


  • PerVirtuous
    June 15, 2008

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    Yes. Every woman wants to be a Madison Avenue Mama. The plague of vanity is epidemic. The diva mentality has crippled an entire culture. Three very excited bunnies.


  • TheComaKid
    June 15, 2008

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    Receipt for shallow soul,
    synthetically designed.

    i love this ending, it depicts perfectly how money can never eneable true happiness but just the impression of having it.

    i love how you show the plastic reality of the world we live in, where media obbsesses over apparent rich idols who are worshipped like false gods who show a warped reality where anything is possible, but in reality normal lifestyles are nothing like the ones they portraty.

    TheComaKid_x


  • RadioPJ
    June 15, 2008

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    Yes, you nailed it. Way too many think image and toys are all there is.
    (PS I just have a couple of pairs of shoes, and they are both cheap)


  • lostangel07
    June 15, 2008

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    I like your poem, I think it makes an interesting statement of society. I think it is ridiculous those who buy things simply because they are "name" rather than beacause they truly like them! However; I suppose it is our indivdual right to do so. But your poem is wonderful the lanauage and descriptivness is breathtaking and the overall piece is amazing


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    June 13, 2008

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    wow this was amazing, and true,
    i mean this blew me away, the whole perfect rhyming and perfect scheme to it all,
    it really did blow me away so so so much,
    our socity has turned into a fashion craved, lieing, cheating, media obsessed, place, everybody forgets the real problems like money and hunger and what goes on in the rest of the world,
    my favourite part of the poem was this:

    Children worn like jewelry,
    costume domestication.
    Vogue-style living,
    persona amputation.

    Time warped body,
    high-end labeled mind.
    Receipt for shallow soul,
    synthetically designed.

    its just amazing,
    all my love,
    kitty xxx


  • bloved
    June 13, 2008

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    This was seriously well penned poem, very witty and well so damn true.

    Our soceity and culture is so infixated [spelling?] of fashion and the glamrouse side of life, we forget about the real problems in the world...the real misery and pain.

    I truely adore the line:

    "Thousand dollar shoes,
    humanitarian amnesia.
    Desensitized by Prada,
    arrogant anesthesia"

    I just wrote a creative piece of how Prada can only bring you back luck. Who the hell pays $600 for a bag or shoes?

    Nice work and good luck in the contest


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    June 13, 2008

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    You Nailed It

    This is incredible. Short phrases strung together in rhyme to produce a perfectly scathing poem. I agree with your words. I am glad my daughters are not hung up on that nonsense.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    June 13, 2008

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    Absolute truth here!!! The plastic fantastic lifestyle and looks... I can't stand it myself!! This is such a well constructed poem about this... excellent write!!!


  • Zenda-Lokki gold member
    June 13, 2008

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    Stunning

    What can I say that hasn't already been said. Just wonderful poetry in motion. So very descriptive conjouring many images within my mind. Jsut fantastic hun x


  • PatheticKt
    June 13, 2008

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    Whoa, each line had few yet totally descriptive words and yet this piece had that amazing theme
    One of the short poems that I find wonderful and the last stanza gave that sad yet powerful touch on this, all right!
    I like shoes, too but not those feminine ones
    Great write, all in all!


  • Lotus-Mama
    June 13, 2008

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    WOW!!! This is AWESOME....

    "falsely advertising"

    "absolution granted"

    "Thousand dollar shoes,
    humanitarian amnesia.
    Desensitized by Prada,
    arrogant anesthesia."

    "Children worn like jewelry"

    Oh my goodness....this is absolutely wonderful! Sad...yes, but so so true.... Congrats on a great piece!


  • RyanosaurusWrecks
    June 13, 2008

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    Ahh, it was worth the wait.
    written with jaw clenched and soft hands...I love it.

    Now I want to return my Tag Hauer...
    lol

    "arrogant anesthesia"

    perfect


  • james119
    June 12, 2008

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    Reading all the comments below, I can think of nothing not already said. I shall repeat the refrain ringing throughout: This is really good poetry and excellent comentary.
    It's hard to pick a favorite, but at the moment I'm stuck on:

    Time warped body,
    high-end labeled mind.
    Receipt for shallow soul,
    synthetically designed.

    Well done

  • islekine gold member
    June 11, 2008

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    Ka den....

    This be one awesome write Jamie!!!
    Guess you want da Gold????? LOL...
    I too have shoes........and no where to wear them!
    Best wishes in the contest!
    Write on.
    *PEACE*

  • NeonRose
    June 11, 2008

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    The devil definitely wears Prada...and you have a taken a devilishly clever turn with this piece! Even made me go check out how many pairs of shoes I have at present.....no, I'm not telling!


    • jamiedoring
      June 11, 2008
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      oh come on....

      you can tell me....I promise I wont tell! lol


  • faderman1959
    June 11, 2008

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    An excellent statement on society these days! Every words rings with truth! Great write my friend!


  • paiz3mily
    June 11, 2008
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    I agree in every way with this poem. it was amzing & its speaks the truth. flows wonderfully. great rhyming pattern. keep it up ! !

    <3 paizlie


  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    Our society has become to much of the giveme type. The more they have the more they want and this is all I could think of when I was reading this. Us poor people know the real meaning of how to live. Great right. Thank you for sharing


  • KateMadness
    June 10, 2008

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    Hmmm

    That was something! I really think the theme is something funny in our society.
    I don't know why but the whole time I was reading that, I was thinking "Material Girl"
    It's pretty bad at what lengths people will go for their bodies and the things they buy. :/

  • cdudecosner
    June 10, 2008
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    Interesting theme. Our culture has definitely become too focused on material things.


  • Raptur3
    June 10, 2008

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    Wow, thats really catchy, and well written. Kudos to you for putting the plastics, fakes and shallow girls on the spot. Love to hate them, Wish to be them, LMAO. Great write!


  • poppa
    June 10, 2008

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    Wonderful write ........ shows how shallow we humans can be, especially with so much suffering in the world today...
    Didnt notice 1 filler word, so that will score well Im sure.....
    good luck

    PS... Well done indeed Miss 23 years old...

    • jamiedoring
      June 10, 2008
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      Thanks Poppa but.....

      Im not being picky...but that first comment of yours that I accidentally erased mentioned me looking 23 and this one doesnt. What the hell? LMAO.

  • aboomer silver member
    June 10, 2008

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    wow - so true!! Great wording!!!
    I can't even begin to imagine the kind of money people spend to look the way they think they should! and the shallowness they show by the money they spend on things that won't last!
    I 'freak' if a pair of shoes cost more than $5 - ON SALE!!! And I have some cool shoes - lol - even paint my own designs on them - and people stop me and ask where I got them!!...LOLOLOL
    VERY well said!! Love this!!!
    best wishes in the contest.


  • Rovingone gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    Whoa! What a good piece. I love those lines! Humanitarian Amnesia, arrogant anesthesia, what descriptive words you use. Excellent. And, who needs expensive clothes anyway.


  • subterfugepoet
    June 10, 2008
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    Another excellent write from a talented and quite fetching lady.

    You really expose the warped nature of greed and our plastic society in this piece. It conjured up the images directly out of 'Sex and the City' for me.

  • subterfugepoet
    June 10, 2008

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    Another excellent write from a talented and quite fetching lady.

    You really expose the warped nature of greed and our plastic society in this piece. It conjured up the images directly out of 'Sex and the City' for me.


  • breedluv gold member
    June 10, 2008

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    This is one of the best rants against our materialistic society I've seen. I'm an avid people watcher, and dream up a life to fit the appearance. This poem does exactly the opposite; you've provided the life, and I can fill out the appearance from your stunning description. Wonderful poetry!


  • swim.x
    June 9, 2008

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    I love this! Someone understands the materialistic, harsh reality that the world has come to. I totally agree with you so this poem reached me Well done.
    x


  • Lucy.
    June 9, 2008

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    Wow! Fantastic. 'Children worn like jewelry', hard hitting line! Well done. You've really hit a note with this one. (not with me, just in general )
    A powerful write and and a brilliant take on the theme. Best of luck in the contest.


  • teddybare
    June 9, 2008
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    reminds me of manhatan for some reason

    great language and flow's good too .. valid points made with intelligent language good write


  • BehindTheShadow
    June 9, 2008
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    Love this. I love the edge that is in some of your poems. Like this one, lol. Great job!

  • dillpickle62
    June 9, 2008
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    Hahahha!

    Cheap shoes. Hahahaha....
    I have three pair. Kind'ah expensive, cheap and cheaper.
    No really this is an excellent poem. Many, many best wishes in this contest.


  • Dalaney gold member
    June 9, 2008

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    lol...your author notes crack me up...I'm with you there You are a stunner, Jamie, plain and simple, and I love the jolt that your poetry sends through me..."Children worn like jewelry" has got to be the best line I've read in days and days...(I instantly thought of Angelina Jolie)...Ciao for now, and I'll be back. Love, Lane

  • Rudolf
    June 9, 2008

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    Amelda marcos

    has nothing on you,
    except a thousand
    overpriced two.
    shoes that is,
    wear under feet
    a thousand a foot
    overpriced treat....
    ........


  • Sin Aesthetic
    June 9, 2008
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    Oh, wow. This is amazing.


    That is all.

  • angelcalled666
    June 9, 2008
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    I like it.
    I love you.
    So its amazing.
    And you are gorgeous.


    I showed my mom your picture.
    And I asked her how old she thought you were, and she said
    23


    =]


    I am not the only one.


    I think you are goregeous.
    <3



    Love,
    Sarah

    • jamiedoring
      June 9, 2008
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      Well holy hell...If I knew this poem would generate THAT response I would have cranked this baby out ages ago.

      ...all I can say is thank you, Im quite flattered, and you are and your Mom are too kind. how sweet.

      Jamie


      • krupty
        June 9, 2008

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        you mean you're not 23? what the hell?

        great poem I love designer stuff, too bad it really is just a piece of fabric with a cool name and a pipe dream. I mean i knew that shirt and those pants and those shoes were great but worth nothing more than a look from a stranger.

        fashion rips out your soul and makes you look fabulous.

        I don't really know what that was all about but i do know you are an amazing writer.


  • Preacher
    June 9, 2008

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    If I had a million Dollars

    Dont take me out of my designer coma, my shoes are cheapies too some anyway. But if I could $850 a pair. Children of the sixties if it feels good do it. Nice write.

    • jamiedoring
      June 9, 2008
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      DO you know....I honestly thought of you when I wrote this poem, LMAO

      What I mean is I realize there ARE exceptions to the rule.

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