I feel hate...I hate my mom
Hate her so damn much for depriving me of a Dad...for leaving me when I was a baby
She was only 16 and fucked a 27 year old guy!
She had no right to leave me
So many guys...what a whore she is
2 more kids after me with 2 different men
Always drunk...yelling and fighting
I honestly dont know why she never wanted me- I ask myself that same question everyday
In fact...she still doesnt want me...its been 15 fucking years!
Stuck me with my unloving grandparents, what a shit life Ive had
Beating me, mentally abusing me, and not having insurance for me
Being made fun of constantly..for what I look like and act like
I just wanted to leave here and move out to be with my mom
I visited her and she acted like she cared- I was so happy
I asked to move and she said yes, but when her boyfriend dissagreed, I was quickly denied
What the fuck?
Ive always only wanted love, for my family to care
Only person I care for in my family is my little brother
Hes my life! Without him...I wouldve killed myself without a second thought
I am so thankful for him
I wish I was 18 so I could take him away from here
He deserves better, I deserve better
I hate her
A contest entry
- How bad do you feel for your thoughts? by Blossom.
330 points, ended July 18, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
i honestly do hate her...
Comments
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oh this sound fimler
my dad had the same poblem all his life and he lived for his bother too and tryed to kill himself when he died , i cryed at the end , cus your all alone , but i understand. and stick in there . theres someone that will love you out there
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im sorry, awwwww. thanks 4 the comment
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its ok
i just get upset when i was reading the poem cus my dad had the same shit and he tryed to kill himself when his bro died cus he lived form him like you live for your bro . and i just dont wont to know someone like you is soffering and theres nothing i can do cus im in the uk and... i just feel bad knowing your going tho what my dad did -
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yea i kno wht u mean. thanks, thts really sweet that u care..it means alot. and now i barely get to see my brother
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Wow hunnie. So much pain and hurt. I wish to take all your pain away, but for now I can only be here to try make you happy. I hope im doing an ok job. Great work. Love always && forever,
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yea...i wish too and same goes 4 ur pain. u do a great job keeping me happy! thanks babe and i love you too!
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This pain..I know
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...im sorry
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Thanks for the comment on my poem, haha, and i really like this, and i also hate my mother, she chose her boy friend over me. and my siblings, and all iv ever wanted was for my mom to care, but then one day i realized i dont need her in my life. If she dosnt want me then i dont want hur either. How old are you, lol, and i jus poesed a poem about my mom,
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ur welcome. awwwww omg those are my exact feelings! r u my twin
jk lol
im 15
and oh cool ill check it out
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I can see AutmnsFlame's point, but then again she's missing out on a lot within poem. You didn't need to describe how you hate your mother ~ anyone with a right mind would kinda know by now, with just reading this
You did a great job, though.
It was very expressive.
It's such trauma what you're going through, and I am sorry that you have to deal with that
You have a beautiful write, none the less.
You must've been through a lot.
Good luck in the Contest!
Sincerely,
dovey ~
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thanks babe. lol
its ok...i learn to deal with it. *hugs*
xoxo thanks again hun
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omg!!!i really love it u always have amazing writes
u can reali feel how strongly u hate her and what she has put u through during ur life...great job and good luck in contest
love ya
lindsay
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oh my lol making me blush! thanks so much hun, yea ive been thru alot but im ok
love you too
xoxo
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Hmmm, this AutumnsFlame doesnt know that some of the best poems ever are just "rants" with emotions that are from the heart; pure emotion that doesnt need a bloody metaphor or similie or any fucking poetic device!!! Sorry....i get angry with people like that!
Okay...i really like it, like i said, real emotion with real feeling, and i believe it is very well conveyed in this. I am not able to ever relate to this, becuase this has never happened to me to this extent, but i can try to understand what you are feeling.....try, but i know that sorta hate for someone, that all consuming hate.
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hehe thank you babe! i get angry too...thanks again 4 ur kind words (as always lol)
xoxo- christina
much love
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Do you really consider this a poem?
If you want my honest opinion, this didn't seem like a piece of art in the form of words to me. It just seemed like a whiny rant about how you hate your mother. I'm not trying to be mean, I'm just stating my true opinion. If you want to write freeverse, fine, but at least use a metaphor or put at least a little bit of imagery or describing words in there... That's what makes a poem a poem. You must SPEAK poetically. I'm sorry, but this was nothing but a written rant, or a letter. There are soooo many things you could do with this poem... for one thing, instead of saying, "I hate her" you could describe how you hate her... like for example, say "I hate her with fierce firey passion which burns inside me like a thousand stars falling out of the sky"... doesn't that sound a lot better than just saying "I hate her"?.... You need to learn how to DESCRIBE what you are writing about. This was too straight-forward, and as a reader, I just couldn't feel what you were trying to convey. -
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DON NOT LEAVE COMMENTS LIKE THIS ON ANY OF MY POEMS! I WRITE HOW I FEEL AND HOW I CHOSE TO DO SO.
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I understand you writing how you feel, but I was just giving my honest opinion on how you could express yourself in a more poetic way. If you don't appriciate honesty, would you like me to lie to you and say that it's good?
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no, id rather you not even bother to comment if u didnt like it lol i want only positive thanks...bye now
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Okay, I'm sorry. I appriciate honesty when people comment my work, so I assumed you would too. I will not comment on any of your other works. Sorry.
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its ok...well i do but i dont like to hear bad things...thanks
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wow. that's nuts. I feel for you.
I like it. the trauma. everything. great write.
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thanks hun
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deep, i dont know if i can say i feel the pain, because i have never been in a situation like this, allthough i know that i can say this poem speaks loud and shares some of your deep thoughts with us, good luck in the contest and as always keep up the wonderful writing, ~Amy
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thanks, ya i kno wht u mean. thnks so much wifey
xoxo- love ya
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