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When We Meant Something

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Imperfections blemish upon my face
as I admire your photograph
wishing within broken promises
of forever.

O' if eyes were blind
bleeding from their hearts
of cold regrets and remorse,
might then opinions dwindle like flames.

 

His stony stare

broke silence on silence

with uttered rejections

of that status quote.

The noticeable clash

sung lullabies in darkened corners of the mind

as mothers peered in fear

of soon to be betrayal.

 

As innocence prevailed in the forgotten

and devils slept in children

screaming for the controls

as the world fell behind the mask.

 

I walk on faltered lines

still whispering your sweet name

hoping the winds will carry my bleeding soul

into your sharpened palms.

 

As you carry the world's tune of destruction

with teary pained reminders

you once understood affection

before the working whore.

Author notes

luna-midnight
I chose: Char
prompt:
"And I dont want the world to see me
cause I don't think they'd understand
when everything's meant to be broken
I just want you to know who I am"
- Goo Goo Dolls [from song: Iris]

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  • Never Fall in Love
    July 2, 2008

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    The switch in language in the second stanza is a bit awkward to say the least. Other than that, very good.


  • Weltt
    June 16, 2008

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    First off, love that song Iris. Second, I love the title you chose here. And third,, wow!! this was wonderful. Seems to be a theme here behind your recent writes which is understandable. You pen your thoughts and experiences so well. I feel a bit of your pain with you sometimes. Don't let the bad times take you over though. Hang onto the good ones and let them help you move on. When we dwell too much in the past we miss a part of today. My little dash of philosophy for the day.

    This will do well I'm sure!! Oh and one final note, that picture is absolutely gorgeous. love it!!


    -Dan


  • Volfeng
    June 16, 2008
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    Nicely done, it has a certain feel to it that I like!

  • Climbing2nothing
    June 16, 2008

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    wow you've really opened your inner circle here alright, theres some brilliant lines here yet i like the whole thing so won't go to details yet bravo!

    w chai an cookies
    -jas

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