and it came the day
when i lost her
i was such a fool
to do the things i've done
i kissed her goodbye
each time i walked out the door
but the treasure was inside
right there in her eyes
innocently i hugged her and left
every day the same thing again
never accepted to put the blame on myself
i was young and determined to be free
but she loved me
i don't know how she could
with all the lies and disguise
she stayed by my side
all she wanted was to be with me
and all i wanted was to live
to make up for all the things i've lost
i was too blinded
by money and having my name up in lights
partying and staying up until dawn
i didn't know
and i didn't bother to notice
that i was losing a friend and a lover
that i was losing what life was made to live for
Author notes
Gomenasai - tATu
that's a song that really freezes the moment and makes me think..
A contest entry
- can't blatantly write about by Dienush.
700 points, ended June 10, 2008, 8 entries
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love it
i really felt your pain and it almost made me cry lol!!!that was really good -
Excellent
To know you are wrong and voice it is half the battle,a
true love with stands time and the life it finds it's self in.Love is flexable,and so very strong. Beautiful expression and perception of emotions
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thank you, i appreciate it
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was i meant to read this?? this is something new i liked it a lot quatrains than they goo loose no rhymes too neww i havent read an unrhymed poem by you sis but its actaullly great
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thnx bro
i just wanted to challenge myself.
with rhymes it's way better though..
but i'm satisfied hehe
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