No lovely red and russet glows
No pleasant walks into the woods
No spiders spinning lacy webs,
Just no September
A contest entry
- #97 20 words; 20 entries; Winklings only, by Lavender Butterfly. by Lyndon.
1500 points, ended July 23, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Each line is a small poem in itself. Very visual.
Why the single comma? Am I missing something syntactical?
Repetition is used wisely. Good work.
Lyndon of the Winklings.
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Indeed these are all those things listed that we would not have without September. Nice work with brevity. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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The stark reality of what would be lost with out September
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This poem made me grin. In my neck of the woods, September is the gentle month when those walks are possible, so I understand your poem 100%. Good luck in the contest. The only critical thing I can say is that the last line is my least favorite. Good luck in the contest. ~ Joyce
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Dee23
thanks so much for the comments, I appreciate it very much and I have altered the last line. Hope it sounds better now.
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a great collaboration of detail here... x
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