the chivis in the hand of the telltale ghost
with the glass blown gun for the parasite host
these are the things we really want most
for the song when the sun goes down
the nails of the singer scratch and scream
with lauging lust and teeth that gleam
with elevated rates and ruby red taste
it's the song when the sun goes down
black velvet with pinpoint lights
blue water over boneknit kites
dark promises hidden at night
sing the song when the sun goes down
Please tell me what you think
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ooooh, makes much more sense now. Mi gusta mi amigo. It could definitely be a new song. I'm envisioning it as more of a death metal, screamo type thing. That's just me though.
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This is awesome! The imagery is phenomenal. You are very, very talented. I love your choice of words! Again...GREAT JOB! Keep it up! I am looking forward to reading more of your work
The One and Only...
~Lynn Jones
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really nice imagery here Matt. Its very you. I love the line "with the glass blown gun for the parasite host". I get a lot of very interesting pictures in my head when I think of it. One thing, you have a typo. line 5 scream vs screem. I'm not really sure what its about, but it does make me feel creepy, so I'm pleased. Great job.
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the first stanza is drugs, the second sex, the third death...i hope to expand more on it, these were just lines i threw together over lunch nd had to write it down
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oops
thanks for the heads up it was just a typo, also thanks for the praise, im glad you liked it, could it be another song?
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