A cerulean globe hung on black
twirls on solar orbital track.
Buffed by a white misty glaze
fired in a kiln of sunlit rays.
Half light, half dark, partners in twin
merging where tilted axis spin.
Caps of ice crowning poles of snow
like crystal diamonds set aglow.
A pitted Moon with smiling face
enchants the night from dark of space.
A boiling mass of burning flame
earns spotted Sun its claim to fame.
Rushing onward at break-neck speed
as fate sows humanity's seed.
The universe is like specks of dust
accelerating with big-bang thrust.
Earth lies amidst a billion stars,
third rock between Venus and Mars.
Caught in gravity’s great expanse
it swirls about in cosmic dance.
A contest entry
- Give me what you got...2 by Luckintheshadows.
1000 points, ended June 20, 2008, 25 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is nice, I like the rhyming and the plot.
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This poem positively glitters!!! I love how the words sing-song through my head. Captivating imagery and superb rhyme scheme..excellent write.
Thanks for sharing this and entering my contest,
Luck. -
arrrr this poems a shinneerr fur shorrr arrr, like the sea will allwayz bee and ye can never quite tell what gravitational effect our psychic alignments have upon the moon and alike a pool cue would have over time in the great sphonical cortex of times blue print.... yet arrr, weel get someplace aye? arrrr,
w a compass and a helicopter
-jas
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this is great. so full of rich imagery and notions. pretty strong rhyme and flow. definitely held my attention. I love space.
Well penned,
creatress
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Simple yet effective poetry. The meter was hypnotizing and the work rose and swelled with the beat of our playful dance with space. But may I ask, if the milky way is our conductor then what beat does the universe dance too? Again, very enchanting and intelligent piece, BRAVO!
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Lovely!
I really love the imagery created here. I love the universe and space. I truley love this, Great work!
"Cerulean globe hung on black
twirls on solar orbital track,"
& the lines
"A pitted Moon with smiling face
enchants the night from outer space"
are probly my favorate! Great job and keep up the Awesome work!
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