The part of me that I love to hate
Or hate to love, it's all the same
The feeling that you can never name
Missing him is a terrible weight
The part of me that I wish was here
He left so long ago
But I want him to know
Though I haven't seen him for many a year
Still I love him after all he did
After all, we were young
But his words, still they stung
But I will forgive him, he was just a kid
Just to see him one more time
I would die
But all I have to do is cry
Not seeing him is an awful crime
My brother, my long lost friend
Author notes
I wrote this about my brother who I haven't seen in 7 years. I miss him so much.
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Oh my so sad!!! It made me want to cry....people say things, and hurt us, butit's always far more painful when it's family. 7 is a good number, you should consider forgiving him, and contacting him...I'm so sorry for the rift in your relationship
Thanks for sharing this, and entering my contest,
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This was filled with emotion. I liked the way you expressed these feelings so effortlessly. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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Loads of emotion well expressed and all round a good poem, please keep entering the later rounds.
All the best
Jeff and Sue
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that is awesome and i love it good luck ADAM
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This is a very touching and well penned poem.
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I would reread this and edit it to make it more concise, and have the ideas flow instead of just popping up for the rhyme.
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OMG. what an amazing poem. Man you really got me crying. I wish I could see my sister. Even though I didn't even know her. I still love her.
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I understand how you feel. I would have had an older brother, but he died before I was born. Lately I've been wondering what he would have been like.
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This is an amazing poem. I really enjoyed reading this piece. Tre really didn't leave, though. He's 3 yrs younger than me. my biological mother put me up for adoption, then a few years later, she had him and he lives with his aunt. but this is an excellent poem, none the less. Thanks for entering!
Best of luck!
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