Single Word Love
Crimson moon light star struck beach
A emotional gate way Just into reach
lips touching with nothing more then
A single kiss laughter, smiles when
Hands Hold for a while skin touching
skin velvet, satin sheets rushing for
thoughts for single words glimmering
eyes shimmering as waves crash into
broken rock lips turn to smiles as
eyes meet gasping as hearts rise a
moonlight walk on a single night as
love blooms with a kiss a emotional
Retreat hearts beat faster complete
emotional defeat into loves arms
Author notes
"I did not read the rules" Just joking black is my favorite color
A contest entry
- A Moment in Forever by Nephlim.
600 points, ended June 16, 2008, 22 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Insert Good Title Name Here by Abidoodle.
1750 points, ended July 13, 2008, 13 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Largest Contest On AP!!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
3000 points, ended August 26, 2008, 1668 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow, this was powerful and well written. Congrats on your well deserved trophies. Started in such soothing imagery and ended with passionate and strong love
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This is simply beautiful, taking your reader on a lovely journey...a pleasure.
~sugar~
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Beautiful. Simply beautiful. I love every line.
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this was lovely. not too sappy, but still seemed honest and gave the reader some sense of imagery. well penned piece.
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thank you very much i am glad you liked it
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i love this. it is so pure and amazing.
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well you're just showing off now aren't you.
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No, you did not read the rules
. Read them again please! Rule Crimson Lies! It's ok though! Enough complaint from this judge, onto commenting!
This is probably exactly what I was asking for, emotional, not too long, not too short, with description, and not compromised of too many moments. I also know that you must have put a whole lot of time and effort into this poem
. Good luck!
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wow
this is pretty good man... sounds like some george michael stuff... which I am sure u jam out too.. keep it up man- rich
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Holy crap. This was an amazing poem all full of that cheery shit that you never write about. I promised that I would never tell anyone about your soft side and here you are displaying it like a banner of love. I think you are an amazing poet and I am truly blessed to have you as my husband.
I love you baby!
Love your wife,
Amadahy Rayne -
I love your run-on sentences... they almost look like poetry :P
It was good
except
you know this thing called a grammar rule
the one about an article?
an article such as a or an.
and how you're supposed to use a for words with consonants in the beginning and an for ones with vowels in the beginning?
yeah....
shine on
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It shows a great deal of emotion but seems like a run on sentence. It could use some periods and comma's. Also it started with a rhyming scheme but didn't continue it. So the rhythm was thrown off a bit. Other then those few small changes I thought it was very well written. Thank you for sharing this and your stepping away from dark poetry is a sucess
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dam and i thought i held the rhym good..... oh well back to the drawing board
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