never failing in her degree of charms
lifts you up and carries you away
her skin is soft as a lime's peel
her magic aura just blows you away
as a bud opens in the sun to become a flower
her beauty unfolds in the sun's rays
you'll want her but can't find her
her stare is a cat's emerald stare
glowing in the dark
a beautiful invisible beauty
when she comes her presence leave you breathless
A contest entry
- Her beauty... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
300 points, ended June 23, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what do you think? please, don't be too cruel; nobody's perfect.
Comments
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Yes I can feel the joy of the words bringing the depth of love around them..well done...thank you so much for entering my contest.....
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"soft as a lime's peel" That's a great simile, distinctive, unusual and vivid. The piece is full of comparisons but that is the most original one. It evokes the smell of the lime as well and the taste. Astringent and pure.
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...i couldn't relate
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