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some cannot


shadows fall before my life
of only wanting becomes a
sea of dreams
I washed ashore as a shell
in sand while the boat could
only move
fantasy lives on in my silent
mind

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prompt: sea of dreams

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  • marlene47 silver member
    June 30, 2008
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    Liked the shadows falling in your life of only wanting, "I wash ashore as a shell," the implied landing as the boat/fantasy does not, and continues to sail/live on in your mind's silence. You are both grounded and drifting. Congratulations on the HM.
    Marlene


  • apropos
    June 10, 2008
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    i love this poem friend! your words float on a sea of dreams. good luck!