I’m thinking about you less and less.
Well what can you do?
I’m letting you fade away,
Left alone in the corner
Where you left me
What do you want me to do?
We’ve passed our use by date
No longer do I dream your face,
Sometime you left me here,
Somewhere I left you behind.
And I’ve given in,
You’ve messed it up.
Have you any idea
How much you screwed me up?
Yes you disappointed me
And boy should you be disgusted,
In all that you are, all that you weren’t…
All that I thought we could be
And all that you said we were.
Move on, but remember me.
Let me haunt a life time
Of just a shadow of what we were.
Neither of you can live up to that.
Author notes
You told me you'd save me.
It's too late for that.
A contest entry
- When Things Fall Apart by iwasakaleidoscope.
390 points, ended August 23, 2008, 31 entries
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I like the direction this poem takes in fitting with the contest. Sometimes leaving someone can be a good thing, sometimes it can be a bad thing, but sometimes it jsut has to happen whether you see it as bad or not. THanks for entering and good luck!
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WOW I so related to this just happened to me really. I just think that when someone doesnt appreciate u and treats u like crap they dont deserve you. I mean this really comforts me to know that I am not alone....its unfortunate to be let down by someone, but it helps to know that someone else knows what ur feeling. Wonderful poem and remember what goes around comes back around.
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I'm glad I've helped. I know just how shit it is, sorry for the lack of a better word lol. I'm kind of so over putting up with it that I don't even have emotions towards him, but then sometimes I'm a balling mess. Go figure.
But you're right, what goes around does come back around. And I hope he gets what he deserves.
And hun, you're never alone. It just feels like that sometimes. Stay safe and keep your chin up. We're better than all of "those" types of guys.
Thank you for the comment
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I've been there more than once unfortunately when love ends a lot of us are left with these feelings because most are done wrong in this society, you wrote from the heart and I admire that
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It is a truth..may be or may not be a welcome situation..yet it is the part of our life my friend..you have touched the core of the theme..I love this write..well said...
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Great write
Telling it like it is certainly gets your point across!
You are better off without especially if he was dishonest as you indicated.
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Strangely Enough, this reminds me of "All that I'm living for" by evenescence.
Overall it was pretty good, better than some of the ones you've been writing lately. Harsh but true. I'm curious as to who it's about and hope its not me!
Anyway - I love you and all that. Muahs!
"We’ve passed our use by date
No longer do I dream your face,
Sometime you left me here,
Somewhere I left you behind.
And I’ve given in,
You’ve messed it up.
Have you any idea
How much you screwed me up?"
Claire-Anne
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Don't be an idiot.
This would never be about you.
My heart is crushed, although it's had a bit of time to heal now.
If this were about you, my heart would still be whirring around in a blender.
I think that makes me sound gay.
I love you and all that too. And don't worry about being harsh, my writing kind of sucks lately, I'm only spitting out half of what my brain is chewing.
I don't know either.
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Ok then, being harsh. this poem isnt up to your usual standard. we're both lagging behind i think... Hmm. should write a joint one..
anyway - get those thoughts outta your mind. doesnt even have to be in poetry form k darls? any form you like.
heh, reading the other comments i feel like a cruel heartless biatch. meh, i am! whoop whoop.
Anywho- love you and i know your ok, and i like the blender part.. wonder what else is in there? (im in a cooking mood right now... might wanna get rid of your heart and make sure i dont make a hearty stir fry with it)
luffles you foreve
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this is really sad sweetheart
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i think the last 2 comment summed it up, i deffinatly knowwhat youre talking about, well technically typing...
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Well Stated
At first I wa sunsur eof what to think about this poem because well it seemed to deal with maybe love gone bad or even worse your own past and your family issues ect. but any ways this was a really well stated penned poem. I admire the depth and quality of wording you chose here and well hopefully by posting this dark little poem you will be okay =) any ways just wanted to add that i like your newest display pic =) and well besides that I enjoyed the poem alot. any ways excellent job and keep it up stating your mind is the way to be =)
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Empowering healing
Saying goodbye to sorrow is a way to saying hello to healing. Dr. Phil says "You are never alone if there for you." "Life isn't cured it is managed". I hope you manage to not empower the pain felt reliving to feel again. I hope you manage to empower yourself to lead you to your true destiny.
We all get sidetracked sometimes seeing in someone what we want to see instead of what is really there. Or sometimes people sidetrack us acting like someone not to reach their end sabotaging our direction. You are no longer that person needing to be saved for you can save yourself.
Bon Voyage on your journey to your true destiny to SELF MATTERS INCLUDES YOU. Yell it! Spell it! Yet, most of all believe it: SELF MATTERS INCLUDES YOU.
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First up, thank you for the comment.
And I think more than anything else, I got this from it. I am no longer that person needing to be saved because I can save myself. But I do want to say it wasn't me asking for help, it was them pretty much forcing it on me (and me rejecting it half the time).
And also, I can honestly say that no one has ever quoted Dr Phil in a comment on my poetry
But hey, he's right. You're right.
I suppose part of me writing this was saying that I'm over it, that I'm moving on. Strange I never knew where I was going till now.
Thank you so very much
I don't know what else to say
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Interesting.
What I want you to remember...
that at least ,he was special before and has something good to hold close to your heart,
even only as a friend
if only you try....
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