Life's complexities glide
within grey areas,
not a checkerboard
of stringent convention
Choking censure strikes
heavy chords
already surrounding
this sorrowed soul
A withering petal,
I drown within
turbulent condemnation
Author notes
Prompt: Pic
20 - 30 words
Artist Credit: "the end" by: the diabolicaL (deviant art)
In a list
A contest entry
- Late Night Quickie (for me at least...) by PerfectImperfection.
600 points, ended June 9, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Such emotion in the write auntie J! Fantastic imagery! Congratulations on the Gold!
♥
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Powerful delivery.....opened wide the dark pit of despair and the selfloathing we find there....excellent poem
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Oh, I love that last stanza! Great take on the prompt and well done on the Gold!
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Congrats on the gold and the strong write, Jacks. Very well done, especially that last line. It really stuck with me and gave it a nice exclamation point of emotion. Once again, I am impressed.
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As she dips deeper into ..
the darkness, I wonder aloud: how the hell can this woman continue to amaze me? congrats on the gold ole depressing one! l.o.l. (i'm just messing with you! don't hate me! ).
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Lovely work here. Life judged gray within the black and white of right and wrong, to bend the soul with censure. Wonderful ending the withering petal, to drown without escape from others judgement. This spins with your usual flair of words molded to blend emotions without wasting lines spoken.
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the first verse strikes a chord I should change in my real world. Standing on black or white as in right or wrong doesn't leave room for the 'grey'. Overall, a great flow and unique in your own special way
love to you,
Joe
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Beautiful rendition. Almost a song. It certainly conveys the feeling of the promp. Good work and congratulations!
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wow, you pinned this prompt amazingly! and definatly deserves the gold!
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Very powerful take!!! WoW... Glad I missed this contest. My brain is short circuting on the prompt lol Well deserved golden beauty 
Delila
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Condemned ! ouch... how 'bout "chided", less severe. gotta hang around some different chiders. See if there is an opening for a judge position, its a promotion from the judged job.
its mostly all grey.
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where're the durn smiliecons?
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Nope, I wanted the severity of 'condemned'.. 'childed' is like a small telling off.. 'condemned' carries a sense of having been judged and sentenced... with no hope for parole.. lol
Always lots of grey...
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one of your finest i love the layout of the write as well love ya xxx
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This fitss the picture so well. It is beauifully sad in its "lost" nature. It seems far too many seem to condemn one another without having any of the truth at hand but simply from some spitful rumor that another has started out of geenerally spite and insecurity though it is the condemnation we place upon ourselves which serves us the least and has the biggest of impacts. Lots of emotion ripping through this one again and seems to me this type of emotion can only come from within where all good poetry comes from.
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wowza sexy lady what a poem
ouchie ouch those feelins are sad and deep
gd luck 2 ya
abe
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Such beautifully sad words... Congratulations on the Gold... Well deserved!
Ken
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Congrats on the Gold! I can see why it has the shiny trophy next to this. The last stanza, I loved!!
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Well deserved of the Gold!! Nice take on the piccie
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This is such a beautiful write, I loved the lingering words. And congratulations on winning the gold trophy, you really deserved it.
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A withering petal,
I drown within
turbulent condemnation
such strong owrds dear...Wonderful dark write...Congrats on the gold!YAH!
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And yet another bright shiny cup to add to the already groaning shelf...
Well deserved Jackie, you always know how to put feelings of despair into words and I always seem to feel as though you have written for me...
All the best...Sue
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Thanks Sue.. seems we are in similar places!!
I gotta stop penning such personal stuff!! lol.. at least one today I could just make up phew!!
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aww.
*throws a life preserver out* No drowning on my watch. 
Dark and full of emotion ... worth every gold speck my Kiwi Queen!
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Grats Jacks!! well deserved!!
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Excellent
What a powerful take on the prompt. So creative and deserving of the gold. Congratulations
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A brilliant piece, I love the way you've incorporated every aspect of the picture with the emotions. Not the best way to feel But a stunning poem. Good luck in the contest
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wow, so deep and strong sis..brilliant, a winner for sure
Cin
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Excellent depth and relevance to the image prompt. Very well penned emotion coursing throughout. Thank you for your entry!
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A most intriguing and beautiful writ my friend! Loved where you took this. Best wishes in the comp
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Oh this was amazing sis!! I love your deep emotion expressed so beautifully once again. A sorrowful beauty you have penned.. Perfect imagery and descriptions for the picture too! Such a lovely write. Loved it!!
Best of luck
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Absolutely loved the second stanza! this is a beautiful piece of poetry that I am privelaged to have read. thanks for sharing sis and best of luck to you!!
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go auntie
its going to b great
goodluck (though you never need it)
i love you
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