Without bells ringing, I can't feel the pain... or recognize the love,
high-definition's visions are opaque and absent of my mind,
even puppeteer's strings have snapped... leaving life limp,
malnutrition at my door like jaws gaping wide of lion, I exhale the world
Author notes
Prompt:
Try to capture that empty feeling when you care about nothing at all in this world.
This isn't about the anger of hate, the drama of suicide, or the sadness of lost love.
It is about the total absence of motivation on any level.
Use no more than 4 lines
A contest entry
- Capturing Emptiness by Jonathing66.
600 points, ended June 9, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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good
Thank you for entering the competition.
I like this one, you really go the feel for the subject matter, perhaps it was just a little bit to dramatic to win
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this is very nice. you convey a lot here without a lot of words. the apathy leaks from the page. limp.
well done,
creatress
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I love the title. A song came to mind while reading your first phrase, which is "I can hear the bells". Good word choice. Very creative write
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