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[ Deer drink from the clear blue stream, ]

Deer drink from the clear blue stream,
that runs across the forest covered monuntains.
Salmon jump upstream to the waterfall,
which falls down like a noble fountain.

Butterflies land on big o' flowers,
as the rainbow stretches from one side to the other.
While to small bears play happily,
because they are cheerful brothers.


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  • my Aim - Tomboy chi
    August 28, 2008

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    I See You Love Writing Lovey Dovey Cuties

    i can change tha like i did to the group .... *blank Stare* How Bout It... mmm?


  • wasksn
    August 6, 2008
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    I love nature in poetry. Very good. I liked it very much. Thank you for sharing.


  • sultan gold member
    August 4, 2008

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    So much light ...

    ... in bringing your love of nature to life in your own words. This is lovely. Thank you for shareing it.


  • Minato Namikaze
    June 9, 2008
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    thanks for pointing that out.

  • kuranui
    June 9, 2008

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    I enjoyed this.

    This paints a very happy picture. I like your poem. Just a suggestion I will make....Always put your poems through spell-check. In the second last line the word "to" should be spelled "two". It is a very nice poem though.

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