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Hello, how are you?
I'm screaming inside
I'm wanting to find you some place in my mind
I washed you away with all of my tears
I burnt your love letters from all of the years
I drank all the memories, every last drop
My heart's beating fast, it's not gonna stop
I want to remember the sound of your voice
You wanted to end us, it wasn't my choice
I drowned all the promises out in the rain
My body is numb from all of the pain
I feel like I'm rotting, my ribs are caved in
My eyes are all hollow, my body's so thin
Life without you is like living in hell
Did you honestly think I would take this so well
I breathe, I cry, that's all I can do
I wouldn't be like this if it wasn't for you
But I can't help but wonder what you're feeling too
So let me ask it again
Hello, how are you?

I tried..

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  • Errant Panther
    June 14

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    Another strongly voiced and heartfelt piece from you, such a pity there is much pain in your life - you are definitely growing both as a person and a poet. Dad is always here for you hun.


  • jamiedoring gold member
    June 9

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    Good Lord girl...reading you sometimes feels like I am reading my diary from when I was a teenager. Your angst, your pain, anger, heartache...this all sounds so familiar.

    You express yourself so well. You'r tone is so unique...a perfect balance of pissed off and vulnerable. Its hard not to feel your words.

    I LOVE how you begin and end this with the short little lines....very effective. Fantastic write!!

    Jamie


  • The Melting Crayon silver member
    June 9

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    Hey babydoll.

    Argh =/

    I love you! NEVER forget that!
    I know what that's like- that feeling,
    and it's incredibly awful, I wouldn't wish
    it on anyone, and your description makes it feel so alive, once again.

    I'm here if you need, Okay?

    btw loved the imagery <3
    and the flow.


    • angelcalled666
      June 9
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      Thanx.

      You know,. allpoetry didnt alert me of your comment.
      So I hadnt thought you had commented them.


      >.<


      Stupid allpoetry alert system.

      =]

  • my.stars.dont.shine gold member
    June 8
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    oh my, i can feel your pain and i dont like it one bit. =[ ya know, we may not talk much anymore and i may be immature but if you ever need anything you can call me anytime and i will always listen to you, i promise.

    i like the way you started and ended this.


    • angelcalled666
      June 8
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      Girl.

      I love you.
      I went off on you the day.
      And I am sorry.


      You DO mean alot to me.
      You did.
      still do.
      always will.



      <3

      thanx for the comment love.
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