Grey skies approach
I look out the window
Thunder, lightning
Commences
Through my front door
To the porch; sit
The edge of the step
I lean forward
Elbows on knees
As I look down
At the floor
Drips meet my skull
Getting stronger
Sounds crashing
Skies flashing
I slowly look up
Watching the water
Hit the ground
Hard, impactful
Time slows
Ripples grow larger
My eyes lock
I stare into the
World in front of me
Something about
The rain
Feels so good
As I close my eyes
And open again
The storm subsides
The water does not
It doesn’t come
From the clouds
Or from the skies
But from my eyes
As my soul cries
Author notes
Picture Prompt http://www.freefoto.com/preview/16-05-76?ffid=16-05-76
A contest entry
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Comments
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very beautiful description of your feelings.Best to you inthe contest
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it is very well written, the way the weather changes and lets us see all the beaty it has to offer, thank you for sharing, good luck in this contest
Linda
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Wow, this is very deep and sad
with some beautiful imagery in it.
You have a lot of great descriptions
throughout this. Beautiful work here
and good luck to you with it!
Jeremy0826 -
Wow. I love the imagery here. It reminds me of watching the storms roll in on my back patio as a kid. =] BEST of luck in my contest.
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Thank you for entering mt contest. This was a wonderful write. I like the imagery of the skies mixed with the feelings of sadness. Good luck
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Very good. this is very describeing. Very well written. "Through my front door To the porch; sit The edge of the step I lean forward Elbows on knees" that was worded so well. thanks for entering my contest i wish you the best of luck. ..<3.. Shelly
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mehhh i lost myself there... it kinda freaked me out actually lol because it was like those times i blacked out... anyway nvm you dont want to hear about that. wonderful poem btw i love your style here and i can feel your emotions through your words. you've seen a lot in this world... you also have talent. thanks so much for entering this and good luck
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amazing. its like every bit of pain from the soul cries with the storm as it subsides. ive cried with storms as my heart and soul, hurt and die.
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wow
hey i loved this poem its almost like i was the one in it, its beautiful you are truely gifted thanks for the comment on mine by the way -
very good
excellent visual
love the rain
powerful emotion as your soul cries
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emotional moving
Ilove this type of formating because presentation is nearly everything
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this is powerful. I like it. It's kinda odd in a way but I feel like I can relate to this but in a way I'm not sure of. I'm sure lots of people feel this way. Like I said very strong
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It doesn’t come
From the clouds
Or from the skies
But from my eyes
As my soul cries
beautiful...the whole poem is about looking into the rain, into the world...and then suddenly it comes back to you...its such a powerful ending...love it =)
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