Standing beneath
morning skies.
Questioning
nothing,
Smiling toward
God above.
Author notes
Credit: Take a Walk by ZZandRA@ dA
Picture credit.
I hope I did this one justice. Yay!!
Enjoy. It is what it is.
{If the formatting is stupid/annoying and enough people tell me so I will standarize it. I just wanted to make it a little more interesting considering it was so short. )
A contest entry
- 10/10/10 Pic Inspired by ZachP.
400 points, ended June 8, 2008, 4 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comment honestly please. But don't be rude. CONSTRUCTIVE CRISTISM is welcome. But don't bash me; I work hard.
Comments
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It's a very easy thing to catch yourself doing some mornings, though from personal experience (and belief, I suppose), it's not God that I'm smiling at, I'm just....smiling. (if that makes any kind of sense).
Good write.
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awsome i love it
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It's lovely, message and format
I enjoy reading very short poems, and this one is perfect. It shows the imagery you wanted which could be seen even without the picture.
Nicely done!
Mari
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Ok, first thing...don't let anyone tell you how to format your poems! Listen to advice but format it the way you want, just because a majority of people may not like it doesn't make them right. I'm done now.
A simple beauty to this poem. It suggests just low simple happiness can be. We don't need gadgets or riches or any of that...just the joy of simple living and the pleasure of knowing God's grace.
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I'll keep that in mind.
Thank you... Again.
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It's incredibly hard to fit a message or a visual into 10 words, but you were able to do it beautifully. I would have gotten the same message if you didn't use a picture. It was a truly beautiful piece with a simplicity you very rarely see in poetry anymore. Great job!!
Sincerely,
modernxtimes
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Simply put, this is beautiful The way this flowed down the page was absolutely superb... wonderful job on breaking the cliche'
Good luck
Estel-Amour
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