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Willow


Memorize me, if you will.
The way I am now
in the image of your mind’s eye;
just as you’ve always wanted me to be.

See every intricate detail.
My heart, my soul, my aura,
the clouds of our union
and the dismay of your awe.

Smile for me as you feel it
deep within the limelight of your fantasy.
For it is all you shall ever have of me.
The vixen transformed, runs free.





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  • Lady Altheia gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    100th hoodwink

    Very nice poem. I felt the tree took on a life of its own. It was a person who can just uproot and run free.


  • individuality gold member
    June 15, 2008

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    a good opening verse - a sense of illusion i pick up on with that fourth line especially, i think we do tend to distort, even with the best of intentions, reality at times rather than looking at beauty for what it is, i guess we just like to do the twist. again i sense the illusion in the second verse, it starts of pretty picture like then slaps with the dismay. and there is the illusion revealed in the final verse as the spirit runs into the wild.


  • ProudMomma
    June 12, 2008

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    lots of ATTITUDE in this poem!! i love it!! i see so much emotion and like hate almost in this poem! great write i truly loved reading this and the line that sticks out so much to me is "my heart, my soul, my aura" but great write!


  • Kari gold member
    June 11, 2008

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    I love your attitude and spirit in this piece. I could literally see almost like a horse running free through the waters when I read this. Way to go you!

  • Shadow Darkstar
    June 9, 2008

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    "My heart, my soul, my aura"

    Aura = Aurora? I don't even think that's spelled right. Anyways. I liked the message of this poem. It kinda spoke to me in a "All you have is this fantasy because you will never truly catch me" type of thing. Every poem I've ever read from you, always has a spiritual message. You're not a hippie are you?


  • maa gold member
    June 9, 2008

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    an amazing verse ...
    so powerful and magical ...
    I can see myself in your mirror ...

    thank you, precious one,
    much love,

    maa


  • Providence
    June 9, 2008

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    Mesmerizing…captivating…enchanting. Effective use of personification. It is a gentle and surrendering piece, but in a most dominant way.

    Bravo!

    Marianne


  • suseann
    June 8, 2008

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    Ha! I love this tartish vixen verse. Such a tease in reading here! Almost boarders vindictive towards someone who has cause you pain."Willow"? As in "see the other side of me".Because you caused this yourself.Been there,done this myself. Very powerfully seductive and tinged in vindication.

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