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Nameless 'Luna'

I
myself the ‘Luna’
Choose to stay far away
So no-one invades my privacy
I love my full-ness
And use my half-ness
To tease scientists
And those who call me half moon.
I am so lonely
Because my nights are so long
But I am your lighting guide
When you’re walking
In the darkness to your home
I get bored and go through phases
Just to make your curiosity go so high
I get weak and tempted
So I wonder around
Your mother ‘Earth’
We embrace and cradle
Each other.. Every dawn
And oh how I enjoy the touch
from the softness of her lips
when all the secrets are told
I carry the mark of eternity
And we’ve been doing this
for thousands of years
we always kept each other company
and you who comes from nothingness
I merely know your shadow
You come and give me different names
According to your moods
I'd rather be nameless
I believe strength
Comes from wisdom
It’s been my way forever
to steal hearts
heal seeking souls
your moods, your time
And your space don’t have a
Place where my goodness resides~


Author notes

I hope this gets at least closer to what you are looking for..

The background is just picture I found in google.com and I made it to a background

Ruby

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  • Justinintendo
    July 13, 2008

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    Wow! This is just the thing I am looking for. You have an amazing talent for personification and the background really works well for the poem. Good luck in the contest. This poem is absolutely stunning.


  • A Citys Ember
    July 10, 2008
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    whoa, that was incredible !


  • TeenageDisaster
    July 10, 2008

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    Amazing. Ive never really thought much about the moon but this has made me think. I like how the moon is connected to the earth yet has no regard for the people on it except that they are shadows. Beautifuly written


  • deercatcher
    July 8, 2008

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    A very pensive piece. Great love for earth, but caution and aloofness for her people...

    http://allpoetry.com/poem/2284255

    Here is one of my "Moon" poems. My name is Moon, so it is a favorite subject!


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    July 8, 2008

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    I read:

    Distance, mystery and incorruptibility, unfathomed by the the scientists.

    It's ancient dance with the Earth in interdependence.

    'And oh how I enjoy the touch
from the softness of her lips'

    I much like the sentiment seen and expressed in the way you are viewing this. For me, it is easy to associate this with gravitational pull, without even mentioning that directly.

    'It’s been my way forever
to steal hearts
heal seeking souls
your moods, your time
And your space don’t have a
Place where my goodness resides~'

    Pointing as a symbol to an incorruptible truth which fails to be reached by any but the ones who reach to it.

    You have used the moons symbolism and personified it, in a way which connects to real meaning. Well done to you.



    A truly wonderful write Ruby!
    Thank you very much for it.

    Sol

    • Amarige
      July 8, 2008
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      ..and Thank you for the inspiring contest Karim..best of luck judging

      Ruby

  • Time Of Your Life
    July 2, 2008
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    wow its amazing, its really captures!!nice one

  • mcfreeman
    July 2, 2008
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    The full pull of moon madness

    is found here.


  • sgking123
    July 2, 2008

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    excellent

    You come and give me different names
    According to your moods
    I'd rather be nameless
    I believe strength
    Comes from wisdom

    The above lines are revealing.Well done .Please comment my poetry as well.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    July 2, 2008

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    This is a nice poem about a wandering lonely moon. It goes well with the blue moon background. It is a cool moon personified as both dependent and independent. Great job.

    It was a pleasure to read it again.


  • Tercil gold member
    July 2, 2008

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    This is so universal, I very much doubt if this is lonelyness, it's more so, that they cannot reach the epitome of godly, you've attained such heights. I am sure that modesty, and all those lovely traits begin with mere mortals, and were chosen to represent the so-called godly of greek and roman folklore, this is as good and it puts you personally within reach by reading about you in this way, Lovely work, just like you, a lovely women.

    • Amarige
      July 2, 2008
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      Thank you so much Tony for your lovely comment
      Ruby


  • aslanlight
    June 25, 2008

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    I use this background in Myspace! Needless to say I think it's beautiful. It's a very, very beautiful poem too and the whole offering is serene and peaceful.

    Peace Georgia

    • Amarige
      June 25, 2008
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      Thank you aslanlight, your entry was gorgeous too
      Ruby


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    June 15, 2008
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    Amazing

    This is a very witty, very beautiful poem. My favorite lines were:

    I get bored and go through phases
    Just to make your curiosity go so high

    Mike

    • Amarige
      June 15, 2008
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      'witty' I like that..thank you for the sweet comment
      Ruby

  • mcfreeman
    June 14, 2008
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    Oh...yes excellent

    and usually I dislike moon poems...


  • Katie Lazette
    June 9, 2008
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    Bravo Ruby34

    This is a beautiful write. I really got into the words. Good luck in the contest...Katie Lazette


  • Quiet places
    June 9, 2008

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    Excellent!

    Such imagery to ponder on in this poem. I enjoyed the personification of the moon and the message it had to express. Great write my friend! Don

    • Amarige
      June 9, 2008

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      Thank you Don,very sweet comment my friend
      Ruby


  • ourgirlFriday
    June 9, 2008

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    This is really nice

    But I think the ending needs a little fixing for flow:
    I'd put "and your moods; your time &
    your space..." Though I don't know what the req.s are for the contest, you've shot for the moon and landed there! Good job!

    • Amarige
      June 9, 2008
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      Thank you for the sweet comment. and your suggestions make sense.
      Ruby


  • IansCyberspace silver member
    June 9, 2008
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    Loved it!

    I bathed in this poem. It was beautifully constructed and described

    • Amarige
      June 9, 2008
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      Thank you for the wonderful comment my friend


  • Lucy.
    June 9, 2008

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    Oh, hello! I've just clicked on this from the featured column not realising it was one in this contest.

    I love the content here, it's very creative. My only suggestion (if you're looking for one ) would be some line breaks. Give us some time to breath and absorb the words a bit more. Such beautiful imagery needs to be savoured!

    Wonderful take on the prompt! Good luck in the contest.

    • Amarige
      June 9, 2008
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      Thank you Lucy for the wonderful comments. Any suggestions are more than welcome
      Ruby


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    June 9, 2008

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    So very beautiful and you are very right...smiles
    I really love this thank you so much for sharing with me....
    Many blessings, best wishes with this entry....
    ~A~

    • Amarige
      June 9, 2008
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      Thank you sweetheart..I am glad you enjoyed it
      Ruby


  • Margaret Denham gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    Your words and background create a magical place in my mind sweetheart, they are both so beautiful.

    Best wishes in the contest.

    Love Margaret

    • Amarige
      June 8, 2008
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      Thank you so much Margaret sweetheart..Im glad you enjoyed it..how are you doing?..and sorry for my silence ..
      Ruby


  • PerVirtuous
    June 8, 2008
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    Very, very nice. I love the whimsical nature. Bravo.

    • Amarige
      June 8, 2008
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      Thank you my friend. Happy you liked it
      Ruby


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    What beautiful words dear, and I love that picture! All the best in the contest.


    Love and peace always,
    mj.

    • Amarige
      June 8, 2008
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      Thank you Michael..for your sweet comment
      Ruby


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    Humm..you are real and loving poet making a eternal link with the universe and bringing the deeper truths for us...amazing thought and verse as well.....thanks for sharing such a wonderful verse..well done...

    • Amarige
      June 8, 2008
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      Thank you PrabhuDayal your comment is so wonderful and much appreciated my friend
      Ruby34


  • penman gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    Beautiful

    Such a great take on the prompt. One can feel the largeness in the ones. So vividly described. Best of luck in the contest.

    • Amarige
      June 8, 2008
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      Thank you my friend..that is sweet comment from you
      Ruby


  • Jalalbad gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    It is awesome that you can tell this from the moon's point of view. I often write that way. Good luck in contest. This is lovely


  • Thoughts-of-Soloman
    June 8, 2008
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    Thank you for entering your lusciously lunar poem into this contest!

    Good luck with the judging.

    Sol

    • Amarige
      June 8, 2008
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      Thank you for your comment Sol and as I said in my notes..I hope I got at least closer to what you were expecting.
      Ruby

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