We are all one consciousness.
(Big happy face hippy fact.)
Bullshit;
If I shared your consciousness?
Suicide would seem vanilla
Compared to Rocky Road
& Watching you watch
'Animal Rescue 911', again.
That was lame.
I can't believe I just said that?
God I hate myself.
Enough to beat you
With a cold Tab in a tube sock.
TBS "Movies For Guys That Like Movies"
Comes back on, it's Bad Boys.
Sean Penn -- You raped my girl! Spicolla (i).
(He looks around dramatically for approval,
And finds it)
Esai Morales -- You raped my sense of self,
Fucking white boy.
(Spits for cultural significance)
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South Dakota, a while back...
Imagine the looks on the faces of the
Sioux, when we started carving the
faces of Assassins on a Mountain that
has served as their Cemetery and
Totem for thousands of years.
How is that different than the Taliban
Blowing Buddha's nose off, really?
Here are ten good examples:
1. I don't like you, or your nose.
2. I don't like them, especially their noses.
3. In a fight, I would kick your fucking ass.
4. Your mother will make me a sandwich,
Sooner then you think, believe that.
5. Your girlfriend will fix me potato salad,
and it will keep, well.
6. I am an excellent bowler, I am a creep. Well, often.
7. I think eating fish & chips makes me more
Of a sailor (bad lisp) a first mate.
8. When I golf, geese fucking fly, fast.
9. When I make rice, Asians make money
And Boa constrictors eat a sad wombat.
10. I have never voted once in my life, but if I did?
It would have been for the guy with the hump, and the
multi colored rubber band bracelets, and taped glasses.
With the sign that said "I'll work for a can of anything
I can mate with versification in a teetering shack in
Cerulean, Idaho." Where I live like a fat carajou heat.
Author notes
Written December 29th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Thought required. Please. by beeblebear.
300 points, ended August 26, 2006, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is a good scan of pop-culture society, and the tool'ing of todays elder and youth alike. There are many points brought up in this through a sideways tackle, and naught the best can block. The unconventional spacing and lining allows for an aesthetic appeal which would not have been acheived otherwise, and allows for pauses and effects. There were a few things which seemed to willingly pull toward that unconvevtional feeling and thus pulled from it, but overall it was enjoyable. -
Very good job here, as always, and i'm glad to see that you have entered my second contest
. good luck and keep on writing
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How about at Uranus?
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interesting. I dont know where to begin.
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"...How is that different than the Taliban
Blowing Buddha's nose off, really?"
Good point. What an intense poem. It was very blunt and truthful, yet sarcastic and humorous...well...to me. Was it wrong for me to snicker at -"Boa constrictors eat a sad wombat"? Talk about the ultimate "oh shit!" moment. I am at a loss for words, horus. I think "great piece" would sound somehow trite for this poem. Very powerful. -
What an interesting approach to diversity... I began this thinking it may have been negative and a little afraid it was going to be crude. But.. the end result brought a smack in the face! lol Glad I caught on (and ducked!) Very interesting and powerful. I also like the comparison to "TV" I do think that suits it a bit, or at least brings it a different approach to the mind's way of thinking.
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another piece of well executed non-linear poetry, that attacks and wins from all sides at once, laying bombs on the minds of the simple and taking prisoners from among the collection of people who really enjoy powerful poetry.
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very interestingly done...great job =p
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hell yeah... nice trophy!
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Well, you're the only one that figured it out, and thank you for the trophy. I'm really humbled, and since poetry is my passion it means everything to me to know that people who read my work? Feel it moving in on them.
Thank you. It used to be called 'the last American Buffalo', but then, I did an edit, an wham... It all made sense. TV. lol. Thank you for your open mindedness. -
contrasting what other people said (and maybe punctuating the fact that im crazy), i really find this a very clear piece. very liberating feeling, reading your work. intruiging and blunt to the point that it really surpasses rationality, reminding us that logic is simply another structure of higher, programmed, brainwashed thinking, something that, to really feel free, we need to bypass.
okay, so my words make sense to me. stop laughing. seriously.
anyways, amazing write, and good luck and cherry bombs and all that.
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people say i am on drugs when they read my stuff as well. love this...of course....you have got just the right length and pace its that calmness again and surety that feels safe even though you are in a bewilderment of words. i might have to just start abbreviating my comments to b.b. or g.in order to avoid boring you with adoration.
loved your piccy of a telly. anarchy evolving anarchy fighting fighting
Edited on Dec 29, 8:54 p.m. because ''. -
you deliver this with a witty kind of hard nosed attitude i thinks awesome very good
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maybe you dropped a bit to much acid and not only are you split but you are perma baking just kidding nice write you got some major issues but thats alright at least you can get them out right i try to keep my issues to myself i dont want people to think ive gone mad or that im crazy but i suppose people just know
lovely piece whats up with all the pics of you in your poems are we a bit into ourselves j/k that pics of you looks diffent maybe its not u but it is -
"your writing is like an acid trip"....... kitty is right... but how would I know... never did acid....... just the boring stuff... didn't enhale though... lol....
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your writing is like an acid trip
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Fascinating, as usual.
ok, here is the part that seems most interesting and meaningful to me... "4. Your mother will make me a sandwich, sooner then you think, believe that." Menacing and comforting at the same time.
Like television. (Thanks for giving me interesting things to read every day.)
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sometimes you have to take the list you wrote about the things you hate, and crumple it up, and throw it over your shoulder, along with a pinch of spilt salt for good luck...
then again, hate for hates sake can be healthy, if measured out in a nice dose and served with lime cordial.
no?
Nyx...
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