The wolf is at the door, the baby's in its bed
In it's sleep it makes no noise, because it has no head
Little sisters next, she screams in the night
Her face twists in vision of the gruesome sight
Time for big brother, he squeals like a girl
The vicious slaughter of the daughter makes his stomach curl
He runs up the stairs, into the darkest level
To find protection from destruction of the fearsome devil
This nightmare isn't over, they must all die tonight
I tighten the noose around his neck as he kicks and fights
Raise him up high, dangle in the hall
Choke and gurgle while blood curdles up and down the walls
One, two I'm coming for you
Three, four I'll kill some more
Five, six the chamber clicks
Seven, eight I cannot wait
Nine, ten do it again
Mommy screams, as she see's her eldest in the hall
Swinging back and forth with the rope under his jaw
She runs to her little girl to keep her safe from harm
She finds her mangled and entangled without any arms
Her tears wash her face as she checks on the babe
Her screams are the final sound when she seen what I made
Slash and stab into her chest
Rip and grind an awesome mess
Tie her down and watch her die
Suck the love out of her eyes
One, two I'm coming for you
Three, four I'll kill some more
Five, six the chamber clicks
Seven, eight I cannot wait
Nine, ten do it again
Daddy's next, through the door he comes
He trembles as the sight of his hanging son
He finds the others as I left them all over the house
He finds his wife in the basement in her favourite blouse
Armed and ready but unsteady he unleashes his rage
With a smile something wild I learned with only age
I slash his throat and let him bleed
He kicks and battles at my feet
Too late for you daddy, you let your family die
I'll start with liver as you quiver thinking of your life
This is the power I earned a long time ago
This is the power of the Scarecrow
Author notes
She ricochets and you don't notice"
A contest entry
- Bloody Thoughts by SpiritDarkmaiden.
1200 points, ended June 29, 2008, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love and Betrayal (Dark/Vampire Contest) by RunningFromReality.
700 points, ended October 11, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Would this nightmare scare you?
Comments
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A thought this was great but didn't follow the rules sorry dq d
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wow! this is my favourite yet... u had me caught up in it just with the first two lines and the rest was definitely not a disappointment. have u watched the movie saw? we have all of them, there are four of em... ur poetry reminds me of those movies and trust me thats a great compliment coz i love them and watch them over and over,
hugs,
georgie,
xxx
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this is really really good i loved every heartstopping line...well written and i love the repeat one two it really added to the write!!!!Awesome!!!
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hA, awww hell.....
this is very sick. WELL WRITTEN! Thanks so much for your entry. I love these lines, they really grip me (as this method fascinates me anyway):
"With a smile something wild I learned with only age
I slash his throat and let him bleed
He kicks and battles at my feet"
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oh my god this made me want to puke...the violence and horror is so strong and is portrayed so well in this poem..it reads like a song and is definately very dark...Poetically it is very sound and really hits the reader, but honestly it is very disturbing
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wow
this is creepy, but i can picture it all in my head an its great. i worship you! haha
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Wow. This is definitely scary. Shiver down the spine and all. Best of luck to you poet in this contest...
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WOW WOW WOW OMG you really can write so well. so much imagery and this really sent shivers down my spine!! amazing!! u are truelly talented!!
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Sh1t!
Yeah, I'm feeling now!
Actually have goosebumps.
(Also the only entry of this nature...)
Very nice (insert more appropriate adjective here) write! -
*claps* This was amazing! Unique storyline, and very nice form. Rhyming fit perfectly; I loved reading it! Thank you so much for entering, and good luck!!
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Well Then The Efffect
of this one upon your writing style has been effective to say the least. Powerful images of words you have left behind.
Best of Luck
Niaish
Silent Hawk
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This... this is F***ING AWESOME!!! OH MY GOODNESS YOU HAVE.. wow you've... wow... I.... wow... wow...... wow....
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This got my attention from the beginning. Twisted and visual. Thank you for entering... best of luck.
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Art at its best. It wasn't too gory, yet still had a little blood in the mix. I loved this piece, it told a realistic - if not horrifying - story and piqued my interest. Thank you for entering.
Bloody wishes
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the rhyme is great, but I couldn't read it all because it was so horrific. No offense, many really suck this kind of dark poetry up and you do it so well that I can't read it LOL. Thanks for entering.
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wow, this reminds me of the movie Freddy, and a mixture of various Sci-Fi movies (yes i love Sci-fi!). Is this an actual nightmare you had or your inspiration from the title? Either way this definately make me want to sleep with a nightlight or something! Hehe =]
Fantastic! Thanks for entering!
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