there she is with her blond hair
and that smile like things can actually
go right in this life.
she is walking with a kind of wobble and i wonder why i
never noticed how her shoulders pull back when she stands.
her stomach it falls, in little rows of
ribs and skin and
nothing much between.
and oh, how i wish i could be--
just a little bit of what she is.
and she turns with that glare behind her,
like the moon is just collapsing from
the weight of trying to mirror this one
last perfect girl.
and sometimes if i close my eyes real tight,
i can almost believe that
she
is
real
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we are all so convinced that once we find the perfect balance,
we will be allright.
and the sky will just fall into
our hands and make everything
so perfect.
i just wish that i could find a better way to be me,
because this way has got to stop.
melt
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woah. this is a great piece.
her stomach it falls, in little rows of
ribs and skin and
nothing much between.
and oh, how i wish i could be--
just a little bit of what she is.
i think what you wrote there is immortal. it's honest and powerful.
i love this. it's simply perfection hun. (:
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i had to comment again. i just love this. gahh so unfair they dont allow applauds for 2nd comments i would have kept commenting then XD -
wow dude.
i really really like this.
so much emotion,
so much imagery.
i can seriously see this play out as you worded it.
beautiful.
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just wow... Beautiful, and sad and perfect flow.
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I find this to be an eye-opening work. You have captured a point so true. IF we could look this way, then we think all will be right. I too was once sucked into this way of thinking long time ago... It is so brave of you to shine the light on this subject. It is so prevalent in today's world. I wish I could give you more applause!!! Bravo !
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Tru I agree with below Bella was a ver good choice.
Anorexia is a horrible disorder thank you for sharing your perspective on it
<3
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Simply lovely. Beautiful. And Bella is a simple and sweet name, quite angelic actually.
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wow is all i have to say
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amazingly beautiful and well written. i need to come back to this and read it over and over.
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Holyfuckstick.
I'm am SO sorry I didn't comment on this!
I thought I did;
I'm sorry, I'm such a horrible friend D:
The thing you said in your author notes
"we are all so convinced that once we find the perfect balance,
we will be allright.
and the sky will just fall into
our hands and make everything
so perfect."
- It's so incredibly true and we all know it won't but we all keep believing.
&&
"i just wish that i could find a better way to be me,"
-- baby, there is no better way to be you because you can't be any better- you've reached your top and youre so FREAKIN AMAZING.
I don't know why you'd say that because you know I love you the way you are and darlin' nothing needs to be changed. I love you for the way you are. I wouldn't care if all your limbs were missing, you had no teeth and you couldn't speak-
I'd love you anyway.
♥
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shut up, you're not a horrible friend.
TAKE IT BACK YOU SILLY BITCH.
ily more than life.
♥
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wow. this is simply amazing
loved it loved it loved it. there was so much depth in your words and the imagery was haunting. this is perfect. I love how the emotions were weaved through so well. simply awesome.
oh I am so very honored to be on your fave list. thanks for adding me I'm so glad you did 
awesome work again
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and sometimes if i close my eyes real tight,
i can almost believe that
she
is
real
WOW.
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i have a new best poem in the world
its called "i see becka"
and shes freaking amazing
the end.
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I dont see how this doesn't make sense to you.
"and oh, how i wish i could be--
just a little bit of what she is."
I think every one has been green at one point in there life but I have never read it so well. good write -
You crush me with your words. Put simply I think that the hard edges left in the poetry, works. The repetitions add movement and emotion. I also feel that the space choices were dead on. I love your simplicity and found your voice so original. There is no such thing as perfect poetry and I like that you have so much freedom to your work. If I was a poem I would want you to coat me with varnish and dabble your words on my stomach.
Just stunning work.
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ohh i got the most shivery goosebumps.
you captured it, how i feel from moment to moment.
<3
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