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Yard Sale Debris

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A day all alone

sitting among

the discarded clothes

scattered on the floor

with the buzz in my brain

humming

something

from a long time ago

with its musty strum

caressing the backbone

of a faded memory

 

 

But the ache in the muscle

groans with the gravity

as I rise to the sound

pounding in my head

with its round, pin-pricks

of pain

piercing the numb

veined surfaces of worn

 

 

So I shake it awake

and let it breathe through my lungs

already crowded

with today’s dusty dreams

still hanging in the closet

 

 

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Image: http://trixypixie.deviantart.com/art/a-lady-out-of-place-67388013

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  • Nicolette gold member
    June 26, 2008

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    Loved the ending of this poem and the way you've weaved seemingly contrasting images together - well done!

    I also liked the personification of a day here and how the opening and closing lines seem to hug this poem. Yes, so much in a day. One thing that I appreciate in a poem is the ability of the writer to carry a metaphor through from beginning to end and I think you've achieved exactly that here in this poem. Very creative application of metaphor and some wonderful abstract images here. This is lovely poetry - thank you for your entry.

    ~ Nicolette


  • righteousme
    June 9, 2008

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    with the buzz in my brain
    humming
    something
    from a long time ago...

    that is my brain all of the time... or i am thinking about the future and what might become of me... very sad and lonely lately... lost in this big wide world...
    yr piece was beautiful...


  • grannyeri gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    Very creative title you have chosen for this poem, and picture as well. Amazing images these words bring to mind, and thoughts it shares. Found the ending very poignant and fitting.