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Five Minutes


one-twenty-four
no sleep but
i'm so tired and
my body aches with grief

one-twenty-five
are you asleep
do you miss me
do you miss her

one-twenty-six
why

one-twenty-seven
why

one-twenty-eight
i miss you
even though i shouldn't

one-twenty-nine
stupid girl

Author notes

Option: Break-ups

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  • newnoakua
    June 16, 2008

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    wow... shorts, kinda choppy... a little iffy... yet I loved it. This poem had a certain... something about it that I really liked!

    Great job and best of luck in the contest!