I search the night sky.
Wishing that I could fly.
Up to Jupiter's moon Ganymede.
The spinning gas, like treasure beads.
To the planet Venus, named for the goddess of love.
With many stars shining above.
To Mars, it's water frozen in vapor form.
The lifeless planet looking forlorn.
Saturn's gaseous rings.
Much beauty to the solar system, it brings.
Uranus on it's tilted axis with methane clouds.
Like a painting in a shroud.
Neptune with it's great dark spot, slowly rotating in space.
In it's place.
The black holes with their shining blue light.
Taking reality to new heights.
But, the most treasured planet.
The one that has the most worth.
Is the beautiful blue planet Earth.
Please tell me what you think
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GREAT
great poem
I enjoyed flying with you. Universe the place filled with love... scientists say it is filled with ether.... black holes.. a grieving broken heart... Venus planet of Love....
"Saturn's gaseous rings." of wedding..........
Our home "Is the beautiful blue planet Earth"
You are YOU Mary
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Thanks, spirit friend. ether, love, broken hearts, the universe are all those things and much more.
And, you are you, Jeet. And everyone is in this universe together.
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HOODWINKED !!!
This is a great astronomical travelogue, so many wonders to see and ponder. The blue planet at the end of the poem is truely a masterpiece. Thanks for shaing this thoughtful poem.
You have been Hoodwinked today by The Poetic Bandits because WE CARE!
Dennis
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You forgot about poor little Pluto and His tears of sadness being kicked to the cosmic curb. great write my sis
love your bro rev papa
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Indeed you're right. I think I left that planet out on purpose. Poor Pluto, eh?
Thanks for stopping by and commenting, William.
Your AP lil Sis,
HaleyMary
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Wow, what a trip through the solar system, very cleverly done.
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Thanks, Luna. I appreciate you stopping by and commenting.
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Excellent !
this is quite an interesting factual account of the
solar system you've penned here well rhymed and written in a novel style very instructive and absorbing.Nice Work,Well Done!. George ++++ -
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Thanks, George. Instructive and absorbing? I wasn't too sure about that, I thought it was a little more simple. Glad you liked it. Thanks for the comment.
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I'm actually surprised this held my attention. In all honesty I wasn't expecting much because generally once I see anything space or science related I jet. But this was really great. It had a beautiful message and was so well written. Wonderful job
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Thanks, Ashleigh. I wasn't too sure about this one. I thought it was a little more simple than my other writes. Glad you liked it and thanks for the comment.
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Holy Moly~~
Oy!! You sure know how to bring forth Words of Wisdom~
I wanted to read more~ MOREEEEEEEEEEE please
Love the rhyme also~
To Mars, it's water frozen in vapor form.
The lifeless planet looking forlorn.
Saturn's gaseous rings.
Much beauty to the solar system, it brings.
These lines grab~ Wowzers!!
So when can I pick Your brain
Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Thanks, Desire. I wasn't too sure about this piece. It was more written on a whim.
I'll try to write more as I get inspired. I better write eventually.
I really gotta spend some time reading to find some inspiration. I appreciate the comment.
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Wonderful knowledge and well written.
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Thanks, Buddy. Always appreciate your comments.
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Awww, your love for the planets and the cosmos comes through in this write. Yes, all the wonders of our solar systems, yet the beautiful gem of all of them is the earth. Thanks for sharing Haley, and keep writing.
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Thanks, Charley. Yeah, I tried to get the love for the solar system to come through. I'm honestly not sure this is one of my best writes. I wrote it a little on a whim, but I tried. I appreciate the comment.
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