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Blindfolds

Jester sight bemuses

in masked affections,

always lures into denial closet

so fairy tales promises

whispered in counterfeit confessional seduction

will not sting

from evaporation

in truth's light.

 

Passing out blindfold tickets

to prevarication's circus,

hoping the magic act

of canard's clown act

will not lead to intermission

of exposure.

Author notes

50 words
Prompt: "Close your eyes when you kiss me. So I don't see the lies that live there"

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  • Lexie - gold member
    June 9, 2008
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    Deep

    and well written, this is a great entry and you've done a wonderful job with the prompt


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    June 8, 2008

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    Funny, I had to do a double take to see which one of you wrote this one Me thinks you two are spending too much time reading each other LMAO A hard hitter, once that can easily mesh into the minds of those that know those lies and know them well. Yes, this one stings.


  • Angelflower
    June 8, 2008

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    I should back out when I see your name..lol..
    You did a wonderful job.. I really loved this..
    I'm actually speechless, so thats a really good thing..lol.. You really did a great job on the prompt.. Thank sfor sharing, best of luck..

    Angel


  • sailor ptolema
    June 8, 2008

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    bravo!

    omg! so great! love the circus reference! ingenious!
    g'luck in the contest!
    loved the first and last 2 lines especially


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    June 8, 2008

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    Powerful and intense piece of poetry this is! Wow!
    You met the prompt head on, I would say!
    Wishing you the very best of all there is!


  • StarEyes
    June 8, 2008

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    WOW!! What a take on the prompt my brother! This is fantastic!! I love it! Incredible!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta

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