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I Am The Last Of The Sorrow

I am dying in this cloud of darkness and light
Like heaven and hell for a moment have combined
Dante loves me still with his tortures of delight
But the gods still see my scars and refuse to leave me blind

I watch the garden of Eden crumble with death by my side
My Libitina she holds my hand as she brings the night
A kiss under flaming stars give the blood I’ve been denied
Now alone I sing the words I know she’ll never write

The worlds can walk towards forgiveness and never be saved
Eternity could pass and the love they would still crave
So I stand on the cracks of the land abandoned in hope
That evil will fade away with a neck on every rope
I am the last survivor of this war that never shall end
I am the last of the sorrow as hearts will always pretend

There are oceans of tears I will cross on a raft of bones
The remains of the dead who I once knew
Like the river Styx I will ignore the waves of moans
With the winds of whispers each one soft and untrue

Beauty is a man with cuts upon all of his skin
I hold him in my heart but soon it will break
He was raped by hate but forever will never give in
So until the dawn he whispers the words of my biggest mistake

The worlds can walk towards forgiveness and never be saved
Eternity could pass and the love they would still crave
So I stand on the cracks of the land abandoned in hope
That evil will fade away with a neck on every rope
I am the last survivor of this war that never shall end
I am the last of the sorrow as hearts will always pretend

On the endless road for a haven I meet with the world
Death holds hand with beauty and the devil steals my heart
The scrolls of passionate sins make out path as they are unfurled
And these words will be our commandments once we break apart

The worlds can walk towards forgiveness and never be saved
Eternity could pass and the love they would still crave
So I stand on the cracks of the land abandoned in hope
That evil will fade away with a neck on every rope
I am the last survivor of this war that never shall end
I am the last of the sorrow as hearts will always pretend

This worlds has walks towards forgiveness and has not been saved
Eternity has passed and the love we still all crave
I have left that land that was abandoned in hope
That evil will fade away with a neck on every rope
I am the last survivor of this war which has come to an end
I am the last of the sorrow as hearts will always pretend

Author notes

Dedicated to Pete
With your hand entwined in mine impossible is an illusion and reality is as invisible as an acid trip


Yes there is alot of religion in this. But like all my other songs its metaphorical. I mean no harm.

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  • hope4revolution
    September 22, 2008

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    there are a lot of lovely images in this. i especially like "But the gods still see my scars and refuse to leave me blind" & "So I stand on the cracks of the land abandoned in hope". i do wish your rhyme scheme was a little more regular, what lines rhyme vary from stanza to stanza & it upsets the rhythm a little bit. thank you for sharing, nice work!


  • catalyst.
    September 11, 2008

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    The worlds can walk towards forgiveness and never be saved
    Eternity could pass and the love they would still crave
    thats my favorite line. Your rhyming is superb and your word choice is great.


  • elmundopasa1
    July 1, 2008

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    wow. very powerful. so much meaning in ever word. it strayed from the prompt at parts, but the profound significance of what you said made up for it. fantastic job. thanks for entering.


  • RawrSmileBabyPlz
    June 26, 2008

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    Wow this poem is just great, very well written. But its 51 lines and i wanted under 50 but since its just one line over i will let it slide mostly because this poem was just insanely good. thanks for entering my contest. i wish you the best of luck.
    ..<3..
    Shelly


  • Strify
    June 18, 2008
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    Beautiful!


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    June 10, 2008

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    So until the dawn he whispers the words of my biggest mistake

    I really enjoy your writes and will be reading some more of it soon. This piece here, kinda has a HIM feel to it, as if while reading it, I could hear the music within. Great job with this.

    **Ktulu Blackwolfe**


  • SixStringDebauchery
    June 9, 2008

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    That was dark as fuck! Wow, it's really good. I think Pope's gonna be chuffed with this one lol. Nahh, I really liked it. I'm really happy you're writing again =D

    I'll love you forever.
    xxx


  • xxUnSpokenxx
    June 8, 2008

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    I wanted to say wow!! This was so good. It pianted a picture in my mind.

    Good luck with the contest.


  • tawk gold member
    June 8, 2008

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    Beautiful lyrics and so uplifting and inspirational. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest Theresa

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