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Slow fade

 

Mercy came knockin'

on my front door.
Peeking through askin'

"How about You"


Biting my lower lip

I bled
 No thankyou.
Leaving me to wonder...

What
could he possibly
have wanted
with me.

Slow
 fade
Lost in Found
Found in lost.

When did
I first
 Give myself
away.

 
knock
knock
knock

Who the.. hell.. is that now. 

 

knock

knock

knock 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Intervention hotline. 

 

Author notes

Contest prompt: Picture prompt above.

Inspired by: Song & lyrics of Aristry: Casting Crowns Song:  SLOW FADE
here is the link to take a peek:

http://new.music.yahoo.com/videos/CastingCrowns/Slow-Fade--60436536

 

 ^GREAT SONG AND LYRICS TO FEAST OUR POETIC HEARTS POWERFULLY,

be sure and check it out!   

 

 

 

pics: talented artistry of glittergraphics.com

resource available: 1--800--905--7655, Intervention Specialists

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  • ears2hearyou gold member
    July 11
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    Please never feel alone...many...beloved and Good
    good people..are struggling.....boldly!
    for it is estimated one of eight Americans is silently
    suffering......to avoid the clawing of sick withdrawls
    due to alcohol, prescriptions, and oxy...which always
    leads to cheap heroin.
    YOu do not have to go to jail to recover painfully..
    call for help...and end your tears of suffering.





  • artis gold member
    July 10

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    a diction without voice, expressed in needles, fermented liquids and smoke, powder on mirrors that reflects the psuedo soul, trapped in a vice of their opwn making, squeezing the life from their flesh, mercy is the last thing they long for, anotjher quick

    the merciless habits of self destruction. sad but true, and a superb way to write about it. Great photo too~~Artis

  • artis gold member
    June 25
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    sometimes mercy is a crutch, we rely on to save us from ourselves, we need to hack, slash and self abuse ourselves back to sanity

    take the rough road so that we remember the journey and detour aorund it the next time, plus it is always nice to wallow a bit in one's misery....lol..great song...lyrics write~~~Artis


  • Never Fall in Love gold member
    June 18

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    I loved your ending!
    I felt it to be less literate and more in the sense of voices trying to probe someone's mind - and so when one set of voices are done with their task - they next one shows up.

    Well done


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    June 16

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    Wonderful writing here. Just had a look at the song/vid. Harrowing really, quite harrowing. You have written so well for the quote. Powerful dark writing indeed. Good luck in the contest Kathleen.

    With
    Dark
    Love
    Wayne Leon


  • poetryality silver member
    June 15

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    There is a knock that speaks to me of familiar in this poem. I just had a discussion yesterday with my eldest daughter where we both realized that bits and pieces of our being were lost. We are seeking to find them and glue them together to create that whole that we both once were. I am grateful we have one another to lean on. I have four children that are my greatest resource of replenishment. Great work dear sister/friend. Keep 'em coming! The best to you in the contest. I knows you will do well here.


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee


  • LadyDementia gold member
    June 10

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    A wonderfully penned poem, love the way you presented it. Very well penned, good luck in the contest

  • PrInCeSsOfRoCk
    June 9

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    an interesting take on the prompt. thought you did a good job though found it weird that you used a song as inspiration when im specifically looking for pieces really inspired straight from the picture prompt. thank you for entering though.


  • moluv10
    June 9

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    Very creative sis. I absolutely love how you wrote this. Great take on that song. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Jfd
    June 9

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    I loved how you started this poem out...and as it progresses it almost feels like the narrators voice is slowly fading, with less to say but more concern...if that makes sense.

  • Jalalbad gold member
    June 8
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    this is a great write, good luck in the contest


  • aj.vamp
    June 8

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    This is good. I love the part
    Slow
    fade
    Lost in Found
    Found in lost.
    I also love the way you wrote it.
    Over all it was AWESOME

    . Rewarded 4


  • Velvet Rose Petals
    June 8

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    I forgot to comment on the pictures. They are very nice. The quote works well for your poem. The first girl reminds me of myself. again beautifully written. I didnt notice the intervention before.
    Rose

  • NurseyPoo
    June 8

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    Sad and heartbreaking piece. I hope you find your way soon and that we will see you here for a long time to come.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Rianna Bear silver member
    June 8

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    loved the "lost in found, found in lost" part! how awesome that was!!!! great feeling of being lost in one's own darkness! sad

    *rianna


  • Swangrnv gold member
    June 8
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    WOW!

    You have such a wonderfully powerful pen!
    I'm knocked off my feet! EXCELLENT PIECE.


  • Velvet Rose Petals
    June 8
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    Lost in Found
    Found in lost.

    I'm digging that.

    Aww you said no to mercy. You must have major strength and power. Amazing write.

    Ros

  • Dads.Girl.No.More.
    June 8

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    Awesome Job!

    This was wonderfully written!

    Slow
    Fade
    Lost in Found
    Found in lost

    Great Job,
    I love that song.

    You'll do great in the contest!

    Love You,
    Nikki

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