What is…?
That foolish American
A fictionist one eyed alien
The blue stuff on your skin
This closet full of ammunition
A man… no soul
A woman…no control
A library…no books
A song…no hook
Alive without a single breath
Imagine life without death
What is this world I’m in
Why are you making grins
Who the heck are you?
And what am I goin’ through
What is…?
That ridiculous American
A starving anorexian
The heat in your friend
All of this annunciation
Jupiter…no rings
A fly…no wings
A CD…no songs
A bell…no bong
A craft book without a single spell
Imagine heaven without hell
What is…?
That crazy American
Why can’t we all be humans?
Just stop global warming
And the militarism massacre
A journal…no page
A show…no stage
A book…no words
A nest…no bird
A knight without his sword
Imagine Christianity without the lord
The world as we know
Is coming to an end
Author notes
this is my first poem that i wrote that i actually fell in love with and its my second or third i ever wrote i hope u like. Now many people don't really understand a meaning, which there is a lot of. I mean unless you actually sit down and study the poem for like 2 hours you probally will get half of the meaning, but i like that cuz it's designed to make you think. If you really want to know the meanings and messages behind the poem you can just message me and we can chat about it. Enjoy!!!
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Comments
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Great write
A man… no soul
A woman…no control
A library…no books
A song…no hook
Alive without a single breath
Imagine life without death
I absoultly love this part...
ive compared life without death as well in some of my work lol.
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this poem raises some questions -
i don't have the time to sit and study this for two hours, sadly, but, i did understand some of what was going on, i think -
they are questions which, believe it or not, many people answer - people who are tired of seeing what is happenign to our world, through humans' own greed and wants and selfishness....
thanks for taking the time to enter
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WOW!!
Very to the point. I like this. What I got from this is Why do we do all the things we accualy do and what would the world or an object be without what it was made of. Most of the mistakes if we look closely are pretty iggnorant but none the less a mistake. Wonderful to read. Keep Writing.
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WOW!!
I really enjoyed this write... And i think we all feel like the world is coming to an end... You did a great job expressing how you feel... Very Well Written!!! Keep up the great work.
Shannon*Leah -
Interesting, I imagine
all the world with all its sin. With its blood and with its evil, with its mud and medieval behavior to each other. We try to love one another - sometimes it is hard... Try to forgive, try to listen to all people. What´s the reason? Trying, trying love and start...
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This poem made me thik of pappy mclame and bitch-tits palin. Censorship also came to mind, which again brought me back to Palin and her trying to censor books in alaskas librarys. but yeah.... good poem.
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Very well written piece here
Its a question many of us are asking today and also very tired of to see our land of the free turning into a drug riddled sick sex for fun without reason children left to starve and be abused uncareing selfish greedy world that is ripping at the seams with
out a care yet feeling everyone else owes them a living to pay all their bills and healthcare when the ones footing the bills cant get shit. There Ive said it I feel better .Your write has truly brought out some feelings I have harbored for a long time
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beatiful
thats all i can say
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This is a very powerful and thought provoking poem for sure. I like the way you set this up. A very clever write indeed. Thanks for sharing it! Blessings, Patty
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Great
This was really really good. I like it a lot. It does make you think about the meanings to the poem and some points I stoped and thought about what you were trying to say but in all its a really really good poem. keep up the good writeing.
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some parts i liked better than others. but mostly it was really great.
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Hurr! Second or third poem ever written?
"fictionist one eyed alien"
I love that word. well done, and thanks for entering
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A nice and consistent poem, but I don't see what message this poem is trying to convey to the reader. That is, it doesn't really make sense to me. Whenever you write a poem, make sure that you know what you're trying to say.
This poem has a lot of good points too. It's filled with a lot of thought-provoking imagery, and I like how you have the refrain of..
"A man... no soul
A woman... no control..."
The gentle and imperfect rhyme is delightful and makes this a fun poem to read. So overall, a good write. =D
By the way, welcome to allpoetry! And thank you for entering my contest. -
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Thank you!!! The song actually has a lot of meaning behind it but it's a song that i hid messages behind messages to sort of make you think. If i actually explained the whole thing it'll probably be a pageful of explanations. And the song it's self has several themes behind it e.g:
The "American" i was talking about are the people who are ruining this country we call America.
And one theme is the mixing of Reality with Illusions
The song came to me and a dream and I played around with it to create a poem/song that really makes you think.
well I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks a lot.
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
While I may not agree with your every thought here, I can definitely see where it comes from and how it fits today's society. It really is a decent poem and certainly makes a person think deeper than normal. There are also some very valid thoughts here. Well done.
Welcome to AP. If you have any questions or need help with anything, feel free to IM me.
Keep expressing through writing.
Storm
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Niiice
Good job!!!
I can see why you said you liked it so much, I really liek it.
It's definatly my 'taste'.
^.^
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