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Primitive Passions

I possess the desire
To be tangled up in you
The scent of your skin
The way my body trembles
Under your touch
Under your gaze
I am enchanted by you
Your kisses make me weak
As I feel your hands slowly
Making their way up my thighs
The heat intensifies
I am desperate for you
I hunger for your touch
I crave you
I can hear your breath becoming ragged
As I take all of you in
Our naked bodies tangled
Up in one another
Primitive passions between us
I yearn for your embrace
Lust heightens my awareness
As we dance between the sheets

Author notes

This is for one of my classes. We had to create a poem with a list of words given to us. So this is what I had to work with.

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  • The-Choke
    June 15, 2008

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    Hmmmm. No offense, but this poem did kind of have like a cookie cutter kind of lust poem feel to it. I guess that's what will happen whenever you're given requirements like word lists and the boundaries that come with them. I think I like you're poem "Love and Lust" does a much better job of describing the lust side of things in a much more descriptive and unique way.


  • OctoberCrush
    June 11, 2008

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    I am enchanted by you
    Your kisses make me weak
    As I feel your hands slowly
    Making their way up my thighs
    The heat intensifies
    I am desperate for you
    I hunger for your touch
    I crave you

    You've really captured 'Love-Lust' at it's highest.
    Wonderful<3


  • Endeavor gold member
    June 11, 2008

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    Excellent


    Primitive passions between us
    I yearn for your embrace
    Lust heightens my awareness
    As we dance between the sheets

    This is quite good with fine sensivity

    Rick


  • Equus
    June 9, 2008
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    some stirring imagery going on in these lines. love it.


  • Galaxy2
    June 8, 2008

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    I appreciate the beautiful desire to be tangled up in me
    The aroma of your rose like fragrant body is charming me
    I can feel your swwet, little body tremble under my lustful touch
    I'm looking at you fixedly
    trying to enchant you if I can
    I shower kisses on you
    feeling you getting weaker under me
    My hands reach your naked body making their way up your sexy thighs
    I feel the heat intensifying
    You seem to be desperate for me
    your hunger increases my hunger too
    I crave you
    I start breathing hard
    My mouth goes down on your pleasure zone
    I kiss your sweet pink petals
    and our naked bodies get entangled
    I can see the violent primitive passion in your bewitching eyes
    The feeling that you yearn for my embrace, heightens my lustful awreness
    and our naked bodies dance in a state of extreme pleasure...between the sheets...

    Thank you, honey, for the pleasure you filled my body with...
    Thank you so much...
    kissesssssss!

    Galaxy2


    • loving.a.soldier
      June 8, 2008
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      And thank you for such an awesome comment! Never had anything like it!!!! Great job

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