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The Swan

For he who wanders the long desolate roads, alone.
There is the occasional rose,  in the dreariness,
the single spring, singing,

a rainbow stretched across the pallor,
which melts away the desperation of desire unfulfilled.

A voice, soft, yet subtly strong,
a hand that touches the conscience,

opens boundaries, previously a blockade
untangles knots, leads the way,
whispers of encouragement, from some where far off.

The sound of rushing wings,
the vision, a sentinel, in the mist of awakening dawn,
which beckons the wanderer on,

 relief from hollow emptiness,
this is the swan.

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Night hope gives me new hope each day, that I might actually pen something worth keeping. lol, she's the bestest!

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  • toomysterious
    June 18, 2008
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    Oh, this is truly beautiful and very well penned. Congrats on the HM.


  • penman gold member
    June 10, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2008

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    • Rovingone gold member
      June 10, 2008
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      Ah, you are just so sweet! I hope you have the most blessed day. You always cheer me up!


  • Night Hope gold member
    June 9, 2008
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    "It is the sound of rushing wings,
    the vision, a sentinel, in the mist of awakening dawn,
    which beckons the wanderer on,

    relief from hollow emptiness,
    this is the swan."

    This is worth keeping, alright...but they can't have it; it's alllll miiiiiiine. Beautiful penning, Poet...although referring to a "sentinel" in a piece about lil' ol' me is more than a bit of poetic license employed with confidence. Hmmm...my name, Wanda Lea, means "weary wanderer"; it seems I was fated to be a writer. Thank you so much for your kind & thoughtful words, my Friend...Keep writing; from what I've seen so far, you have the Gift. Good luck in Nicky's contest. Wanda


  • jamiedoring
    June 9, 2008

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    I would say this is worth keeping....to say the least!!

    yet another beautiful write...differnt, style-wise from what I am used to seeing from you...but just as great!

    ....something worth keeping?? Thats just crazy!

    Jamie


  • PageTurner
    June 8, 2008

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    You know the Lady well, my Friend

    "There is a voice, soft, yet subtly strong,
    a hand that touches the conscience,
    opens boundaries, previously a blockade
    untangles knots, leads the way,
    a whisper of encouragement"

    You've describe "The Swan" to a T
    That is exactly what she does/done for me


    This is Definitely "A Keeper", Scribe.
    Good Luck in the contest!

    ~ Nicky♥


  • Patpowers silver member
    June 8, 2008
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    NICE ONE!

    The Swan is just a beautiful work of poetic beauty and expression. I liked this! WAY TO GO!!

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