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Writing With Emotional Confusion

Some days are often empty
with the darkness all around
I cannot find direction
and I don't know where I'm bound.

That's when I write my darkest
with some pieces filled with pain
I wonder if the light will show
and release my inner strain.

And when I don't know how I feel
I look for picture clues
pretending that I'm the one inside
and through their eyes I view.

Sometimes with jumbled feelings
I just write with honesty
that's often when the best does flow
for my writing is my key.

Writing thoughts in disarray
looks like a checkered quilt
but many of my poems are
upon these thoughts well built.

Author notes

Quick Thought 3
How can I write my poetry,
When I dont know how I feel,
My emotions are going haywire,
With nothing seeming real.

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  • Michael-B
    June 13, 2008

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    Faultless :)

    I've been re-reading this piece trying to comment on it for the last couple of days now and its not because I couldn't comment on it, I could easily say very well done good luck in the contest and that would be it, but I like to analyse poems and usually point out mistakes not to be harsh but to be helpful in everyones learning. However I've not been able to find fault in this poem at all, the rhyming is spot on, there are no spelling or grammar errors, the message and feeling from the poem is great and I can relate it both to my own experiences and relate it back to my quick thought with ease.

    Saying that though there is one place where the flow just sticks slightly for me and that is in the last stanza.

    "Writing thoughts in disarray
    look like a checkered quilt
    but many of my poems are
    upon these thoughts well built."

    I'm just wondering if it should be looks instead of look. I only say that because it flows off the tongue much easier.

    But like I've said a faultless piece.


  • maggiejamespoet silver member
    June 9, 2008
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    Great poem in flow and ideas. Especially like the last stanza--good luck in the contest!


  • The Poetic Angel
    June 8, 2008

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    awsome mum

    sounds like me when i write lol

    loves ya

    xxx cheeky xxx

  • Bob Fox
    June 8, 2008

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    So true

    Oh how I can relate to this fine write. Often I just let it flow out of my crazy mind and on to the puter without looking back. Perhaps that explains all the errors. But again so true and I love the rhyme

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