I cant' believe I trusted you!
I trusted US being alone...
WHich was the BIGGEST mistake
I have EVER made.
You can SAY you're sorry
Until you turn blue in the face
But the words "I'm sorry"
Mean NOTHIGN to me.
I understand how you feel
But it was NO EXCUSE
For what you did...
I can't trust you now.
I said "No I don't want to"
That should have been enough
"Please, just one time??"
You pleaded... TWICE!!!!!!!! not once, BUT TWICE!
You are just sick!
I do still love you,
But not in the way
You say you love me.
Don't just say
"I'm so sorry"
But mean it
And show it.
I shouldn't have trusted
Such a rat like you...
I can't believe I loved you...
And in some ways... well, I still do.
I wish I could re-do
Everything that happened...
Maybe I wouldn't be
Feeling so shitty
I want to forgive you
FULLY forgive you for this...
But right now, I just can't...
I need my time to see it.
Author notes
Written 6-1-2008
Posted 6-8-2008
I don't want to explain it right now... just... yeah.
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The capitals don't really add to the poem.
I shouldn't have trusted
Such a rat like you...
I can't believe I loved you...
And in some ways... well, I still do.
Those lines were great.
Nice write -
i love this! its so powerful and fits the pic.
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AMAZING!
betrayed, abused. very emotional i've read this b4 but its very excilent poem for this contest.
i love it keep it up baby love you
KEEP THE ART ALIVE,
TWiZTiD FaTMaN -
wow
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Life has its moments of confusion
Often we all reach our time where nothing seems to make sense and those around us just keep trying to be there only they dont know how or what you want that would make you feel better youdont tell them so they are pushed away and everyone feels bad and feeling lost .Talk is good and listening to is the only way to solve anything
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Hi Crimsomviper, WOW,
There's a lot of emotion in this poem, I take it it happened twice? sometimes forgiveness takes a while, and sometimes it can't be, because the trust is gone, and then everything is strained. I'm so sorry if this is real!!! the poem was so good, the emotions easy to feel. I did notice a few errors! all in all, I loved it.
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yeah, it happened twice in the same day... that's the bad thing. Anyhow... Thanks. What errors are there?
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