my flesh layed dark
my heart was cold
bound and chained
all i felt was cold
aged by time
i grew daily old
living here inside the hole
one day i took another look
as the preacher gave us all
the book
i read the words
and and i found light
GODS dove apppeared
and saved me tonight
A contest entry
- WOW YOU WON'T BELIEVE THIS!!! by elmundopasa1.
300 points, ended July 4, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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How moativating feelings of this write..just captivating and touching as well..I love it..well done..and thanks for sharing..
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Raggy, I can always tell you words are truly heartfelt
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you saved yourself with this one ,,well done R xx
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hey ruthie
so what exactly is this poem about it is pretty cool i like it tell vicky if u get a chance to try to contact me on my space or allpoetry thank u and i love ya TTFN
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Beautiful!
Such heavenly words flowing this wonderful message to your reader! The imagery and emotion just fit the moment as if unknowingly waiting for this speck in time to arrive. Excellent job! I truly enjoyed it. Don
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Realistic metaphor, we do live in a hole, as long as our spirit is not awaken.
Nicely done
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lovely poem raggyann..good luck in the contest..xxx
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This is such a lovely write and had such a wonderful ending. I had a look at this picture and you have done wonderfully here with this write. All the best for the contest.
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First stanza hits it home for me. I can relate. Great job
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Precious Words
Thanks for sharing here.
Your words touch my soul.
Much love, your family here and friend.
-Timothy
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i love it
this is awsome ruthie u are such an awsome poet u are the main one who inspired me have u seen any of my new ones thy are pretty good i think i am getting alittle better tell me what u think love ya -
hmm. very interesting write. i feel like something is missing though. i feel the passion in how you arranged the words, but it seems empty beneath it. idk. maybe i'm analyzing too much. well done though. thank you for entering.!
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Very uplifting and spiritual. I so enjoyed reading good luck in the contest Theresa
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